It is more important for schoolchildren to learn about local history than world history. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There has been an increasingly popularised opinion that students should prioritize learning local history over global one. From my perspective, I partly agree with the statement for the following reasons.
On the one hand, having a solid understanding of world history is undeniably beneficial for schoolchildren to a certain extent. Knowing world history is a requisite for global citizens. The rich history of the world helps students acknowledge their home country’s position in the international market. Subsequently, they can come up with innovative ways to contribute to national development that are suitable for the current situation of their country. Additionally, world history contributes to mutual understanding between people from different cultures. Communicating intelligently with foreigners requires that both parties to the conversation share a common fund of knowledge, information, and vocabulary.
On the other hand, students should already have a thorough understanding of local history before learning about world history. History partly reflects the past's society, ideologies, and cultures. Developing knowledge of domestic history means developing knowledge of the unique cultures of the learners’ countries, which subsequently enhances their cultural identity. Another point worth considering is that the ancestors’ experiences can be more valuable than those from world history. Due to cultural and geographical differences, when students want to apply any measures of a great man in the world’s history to solve any social issues of the nation, they have to modify them to suit the case. Conversely, the ancestors had come up with an effective method that was suitable for the local geography. For instance, in 938, Ngo Quyen had taken advantage of the Bach Dang River to protect Vietnam against Chinese invaders. Later on, in 1288, Tran Quoc Tuan used the same strategy to fight Mongolia, creating one of the greatest victories in Vietnamese military history. However, this cannot be implemented in another country for any purpose.
In conclusion, while having a broad understanding of world history exerts several advantages, schoolchildren should learn domestic history first. It is advisable that schools teach national history to primary and secondary school students, and international history to high school students.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 156, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'pasts'' or 'past's'?
Suggestion: pasts'; past's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, first, however, if, second, so, while, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2023.0 1615.20841683 125% => OK
No of words: 349.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.79656160458 5.12529762239 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13328466038 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.598853868195 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 621.0 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.0218921534 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.473684211 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3684210526 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.36842105263 7.06120827912 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.342053009199 0.244688304435 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102839435192 0.084324248473 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0750245557981 0.0667982634062 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207560224122 0.151304729494 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0242114890582 0.056905535591 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.28 50.2224549098 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.36 12.4159519038 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.42 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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