It is more important to spend public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on treatment of people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is argued by a majority of citizens that the government should allocate money on given people the incentives to lead a healthy lifestyle rather than using them on those who are already diagnosed with diseases. From my personal perspective, I would partly take side with this opinion and I will further elaborate in this essay.
On the one hand, most prevailing disease in this day and age are the consequence of unhealthy eating habits and the deficiency of physical activities: obesity, diabetes, gout, etc, to name a few. It is reported that there is a rapid increase in the proportion of kids suffering from obesity as a consequence of excessive calories consumption and low activity level, hence, should the authorities wisely allocate public money on constructing new exercising facilities and encouraging healthy habits at first, these matters would never made it appearance in society. As an old saying goes: “Prevention is better than cure”
On the other hand, there should be an adequate expenditure of the nation’s budget with the aim of providing sufficient health care to those who have already being diagnose with ailments. It would be an unmoral and egoistic approach if there is no monetary aid for these cases. Considering hereditary and unavoidable ailments such as: cardiovascular diseases that runs in family, illness that comes with ages, unexpected injuries. In the case of children who are diagnosed with inborn heart disease, it is the government’s responsibility to offer proper financial support and treatments for them. By doing so, it would not only be a great helping hand to those in need but also make a great contribution in improving the nation’s overall fitness levels and life expectancy.
In a nutshell, I would take a dim view of the idea that money should only be spent on encouraging healthy lifestyle rather than on treatments for those in need since both sides has its own reasons and public money should be equally distributed for all.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, so, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1674.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 327.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11926605505 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91735746386 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.593272171254 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 533.7 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.2975951904 158% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.5311856123 49.4020404114 153% => OK
Chars per sentence: 167.4 106.682146367 157% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.7 20.7667163134 157% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.9 7.06120827912 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141884092359 0.244688304435 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0512671187512 0.084324248473 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0504542952493 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0884836482842 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0262116650463 0.056905535591 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.0 13.0946893788 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.0 50.2224549098 78% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.01 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.62 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.1190380762 146% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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