It is said that the amount of violence on the TV programs has negative effect on our social development and therefore should be reduced.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Essay topics:

It is said that the amount of violence on the TV programs has negative effect on our social development and therefore should be reduced.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

there has been many claims against the violence elements on tv shows in recent years. It is believed to have brought negative impacts to the society as a whole, and the majority stated that this should be alleviated. I totally agree with the idea.

To begin with, youngsters especially teenagers are easily effected by the things broadcasted by the media. young children enjoy imitating the images on tv because in their reflections, such images look awesome. For example, if teenagers try to smoke or drink as they saw actors or actress on the screen doing so, this will turn into bad habits. these habits, however, will eventually be nurtured day by day. Although smoke and drink seems to be harmless to the society, the insidious effects of such is considerable. Drunk people hardly control the behaviors, therefore, they may endangered others in many cases.

Furthermore, nowadays, most of the tv programs are criminal shows. Several famous series of films show on tv during prime time like murder in the first or how to get away with murder. Despite of attractive plot, such films contain many criminal elements which is not good for the young. Moreover, there is no controlling method to prevent children from watching such shows. By virtue of that, there has been a incline in number of illegal act on the worldwide scale.

Summing up, for all the reasons listed above, I deem that shows, programs or films which include criminal or violence scenes should not be shown too much on the screen. Instead, governments shall take the responsibility in controlling the amount of these elements on media.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, therefore, for example, in many cases, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1350.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 270.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5882927306 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.633333333333 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 404.1 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.6142838394 49.4020404114 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.375 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.875 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.875 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176364389272 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0521448462089 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0411492324024 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108680350342 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0494398849689 0.056905535591 87% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.0946893788 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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