Many museums charge for admission while others are free.
Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?
For years, museums have opened to served the public, especially who urge to dive in history and artifacts. However, while some museums let the visitor free entrance, some served with fee. This leads to a questions whether the benefit of this action prevail the disadvantages.
On the one hand, museums may not be an alluring location for young generations, not to mention if there is an entrance fee. Only a few people willing to pay admission in order to visit a museum, since they rather focusing on other attractions. Therefore, the policy may become a factor prevents students and youngsters accessing free knowledge. This goes against the aphorism of museums, which is to collect and secure antiquity for the education or study of the public.
On the other hand, entrance fee is a great source of income. Museums can generate its own revenue, and use that for various purposes, including maintaining operation as well as reserving the artifacts. By virtue of such, certain museums in Ho Chi Minh City has successfully launched workshops, and exhibits, or even provide the visitors with modern facility, which attracts attention from the community. Positive feedback was given, along with the excitement from the young visitors. Furthermore, some even organizes professional tour guides for foreigners to enhance the service of the place, encourage people to visit the location and acquire knowledge.
To sum up, from a personal standpoint, I firmly deem that the advantages of admission charging policy in many museums outweigh the disadvantages as revenue from such a source can be used to improve the place effectively.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, while, as well as, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 8.0 24.0651302605 33% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1367.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 263.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19771863118 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84180789978 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.627376425856 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 432.9 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.4062330031 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.153846154 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2307692308 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.61538461538 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314445565274 0.244688304435 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0856711162072 0.084324248473 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0668575691351 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174342667244 0.151304729494 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0469355026514 0.056905535591 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.55 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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