It is said that the majority of television programmes had better concentrate on educating the young generation about the essential of social aspects. While I partly agree with this idea, other issues such as advertisement or entertainment cannot overlooked.
On the one hand, it is believed that some social problems related to environment and transportation is becoming increasingly should be showed on TV. In terms of environment events, some plants have discharged water that not be treated properly directly to river, leading a detrimental damage to water sources where residents nearby living. As a result, a number of people suffer from malignant diseases such as colon cancer. This phenomenon should be announced widely in order to help citizens aware to regions where they are inhibiting as looking for effective ways, such as filtering water before cooking and drinking, to protect their health in this situation. From the perspective of transportation, as the worsening of the atmosphere worldwide due to gas emission from a large private transportation, the authorities could raise citizens' awareness about this matter through TV channels. This would be also an productive and simple measure to alleviate air pollution by encouraging people to use public means of transport via TV programmes.
On the other hand, I would argue that other things, apart from social issues, is cruel to human beings. Firstly, it is undeniable that some channels for the purpose of humor is dispensable. Watching the Disney channel, for example, could help teenagers and adolescences release stress after exhausted working-days. Without these entertainment channels, human lives would be monotonous and tedious. In addition, the youth can consider celebrities who appear on TV shows as role models for them to follow up and get motivated. Secondly, people can broaden their knowledge and enhance their horrizons about geography and novel inventions through travel advertisement and news. Even people who are always up to the ears can keep up with the last news by simply listening to TV programmes.
In conclusion, although the information about social development is important, it seems to me that other issues including advertising and ways to relaxing cannot be underestimated.
It is said that the majority of television programmes had better concentrate on educating the young generation about the essential of social aspects. While I partly agree with this idea, other issues such as advertisement or entertainment cannot overlooked.
On the one hand, it is believed that some social problems related to environment and transportation is becoming increasingly should be showed on TV. In terms of environment events, some plants have discharged water that not be treated properly directly to river, leading a detrimental damage to water sources where residents nearby living. As a result, a number of people suffer from malignant diseases such as colon cancer. This phenomenon should be announced widely in order to help citizens aware to regions where they are inhibiting as looking for effective ways, such as filtering water before cooking and drinking, to protect their health in this situation. From the perspective of transportation, as the worsening of the atmosphere worldwide due to gas emission from a large private transportation, the authorities could raise citizens' awareness about this matter through TV channels. This would be also an productive and simple measure to alleviate air pollution by encouraging people to use public means of transport via TV programmes.
On the other hand, I would argue that other things, apart from social issues, is cruel to human beings. Firstly, it is undeniable that some channels for the purpose of humor is dispensable. Watching the Disney channel, for example, could help teenagers and adolescences release stress after exhausted working-days. Without these entertainment channels, human lives would be monotonous and tedious. In addition, the youth can consider celebrities who appear on TV shows as role models for them to follow up and get motivated. Secondly, people can broaden their knowledge and enhance their horrizons about geography and novel inventions through travel advertisement and news. Even people who are always up to the ears can keep up with the last news by simply listening to TV programmes.
In conclusion, although the information about social development is important, it seems to me that other issues including advertising and ways to relaxing cannot be underestimated.
- Although it is believed that pleasure reading is a better way to improve imagination and linguistic skills I think that learning through watching TV is as effective as reading Of course reading for pleasure brings benefits to the readers When reading the 73
- It is true that the quality of competitiveness is essential in almost societies Although there are several benefits from being competitive I believe that the drawbacks of this tendency cannot be overlooked On the one hand the development of communities ba 78
- The table illustrates the amount of money which is allocated in the US EU and other nations used in support of technology by charities over the period from 2006 to 2010 Overall it is evident that most of the countries experienced an increase during the gi 56
- It is true that many art galleries and historical buildings are primarily visited by people from other regions not the locals While there are several reasons to account for this phenomenon some measures should be taken to make these places more attractive 61
- The bar chart illustrates the percentage of the urban population in 3 continents and the whole world over the period between 1950 and 2000 and including the prediction to 2030 Overall it is evident that the population of Latin America was always highest c 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 271, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'detrimental damage'.
Suggestion: detrimental damage
...ted properly directly to river, leading a detrimental damage to water sources where residents nearby...
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Line 2, column 911, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...through TV channels. This would be also an productive and simple measure to allevi...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... means of transport via TV programmes. On the other hand, I would argue that ot...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... by simply listening to TV programmes. In conclusion, although the information ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, look, second, secondly, so, while, apart from, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1925.0 1615.20841683 119% => OK
No of words: 354.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43785310734 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06686655482 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.607344632768 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 588.6 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.7375902647 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.3125 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.125 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.3125 7.06120827912 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291731164134 0.244688304435 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0965211411441 0.084324248473 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.161852750779 0.0667982634062 242% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.287296365377 0.151304729494 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.335034053259 0.056905535591 589% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.27 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.77 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 78.4519038076 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.