kane and Abel Story
William Kane, who was born in a rich family, whose father is a bank president with a beautiful wife.
Abel, who was raised by a hunter family when his mother died because of giving birth from edge forest in Poland.
William studied Harvard and inherited financial talent from a wealthy father, who died in the Titanic boat. He advanced in his career and became president of a big America Bank.
Abel was taken by a barren in a castle to study with his son because of his intelligent.
When Russian troops occupied Poland, Nam Tuoc, and his son were killed. Nam Tuoc gave Abel a silver ring to show that Abel is his son and all his assets are Abel's even Russian troops taken it. Abel had to live in the basement of the castle for three years in poor situation, then be taken to prison in Russia. He escaped and experienced in many difficulties to be able to come to America to start a new life, Abel fluently five languages.
William's mother remarried with Henry, who is a bad guy and cheated her. She died when pregnant with Henry. William chased Henry out of the house when he was sixteen years old, starting a series of events in his later life.
Abel worked at the restaurant and studied hard to graduated from university. Abel became the boss of a hotel, which will belong to the bank after the previous boss dept the bank big money when the stock market collapsed.
Abel hated the banker- William, claiming that William had caused his former boss to commit suicide because of debt, starting his revenge plan later.
When Abel seemed to lose everything, he was given a $2 million loan by an anonymous person to continue his hotel business. He had assumed that his benefactress was the hotel owner, which is opposite his hotel.
The business has become more and more convenient, Abel has opened many Nam Tuoc hotels in many countries.
William and Abel joined the against Nazi war and returned with many wounds, but they quickly recovered.
Abel expanded his relationship with the government through Henry, and Abel also captured many of the bank's shares that William was president of. Abel dumped shares of the airline company, which William Bank was a major investor.
William sued Abel and wanted to put Abel in jail by accusing Abel of bribing the government agency. Abel made William resign as bank chairman when Abel became the bank's largest shareholder. Conflicts between them are more and more.
Richard-son of William and Florentyna- daughter of Abel fell in love and married despite his father's protests. They built a chain of stores and became rich even they started very poor after left their house.
William and Abel met each other when the two went to see the inauguration of Florentyna's eleventh store sneaky. William died before Abel. After learning that William was the one who gave him a loan of $2 million before, Abel was deeply regretful. He left all of his fortunes to his daughter and the silver ring, which was once given to him by Nam Tuoc when he accepted him as a child for the nephew, whose name is William Abel
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...oney when the stock market collapsed. Abel hated the banker- William, claiming tha...
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Line 9, column 52, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eemed to lose everything, he was given a million loan by an anonymous person to c...
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Line 10, column 67, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun Nam seems to be countable; consider using: 'many '.
Suggestion: many
...re and more convenient, Abel has opened many Nam Tuoc hotels in many countries. Willia...
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Line 13, column 119, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (William) must be used with a third-person verb: 'resigns'.
Suggestion: resigns
...he government agency. Abel made William resign as bank chairman when Abel became the b...
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Line 13, column 164, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'banks the largest'.
Suggestion: banks the largest
...n as bank chairman when Abel became the banks largest shareholder. Conflicts between them are...
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Line 16, column 201, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lliam was the one who gave him a loan of million before, Abel was deeply regretfu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 7.30460921844 342% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 41.998997996 174% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2517.0 1615.20841683 156% => OK
No of words: 536.0 315.596192385 170% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69589552239 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81161862636 4.20363070211 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32824384406 2.80592935109 83% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 176.041082164 150% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492537313433 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 785.7 506.74238477 155% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 16.0721442886 187% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.8258874806 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.9 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8666666667 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.766666666667 7.06120827912 11% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 15.0 4.38176352705 342% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 18.0 3.9879759519 451% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225126485122 0.244688304435 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0758125842829 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0654650841875 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0939078572256 0.151304729494 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0612852284266 0.056905535591 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 13.0946893788 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.68 12.4159519038 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 78.4519038076 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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