In today's high advanced era ,advertisement play a paramount role for being innovative and informative .All age groups especially children are very influenced by advertisement related to fast food and toys and insist their parents to get them I agree that such type of advertisements should be prohibited. This essay will explain my views in the upcoming paragraphs.
To begin with ,the predominant reason behind my approval of fast food is related to adoption of fast food. Tobe precise ,by watching advertisement related to fast food children prefer them more as compared to healthy diet .In every big or small celebration the items that is served the most is fast food .To exemplify ,McDonald and pizza huts are spreading their market due to fast food advertisements .Moreover, fast food also puts detrimental impact on the health of children. Obesity that is a serious problem among children is a direct result of the snacks as it contains huge amount of oil and fatty acids .Additionally ,it also leads to problems related to acidity ,cholesterol among teenagers.
Probing further ,adds related to toys encourages children to purchase them as it puts and impressive impression on the innocent mind which give the birth to use and throw society. For example ,after watching advertisement of new technology toys a child starts forcing his parents to buy the latest version .lt puts extra burden on the budget of parents that they earn by working day and night .In addition to it ,these toy advertisements also distract the children from studies as they cannot fully concentrate on their studies and become unable to achieve desired aims of their parents .
To conclude, althiugh the advertisement are very crucial in today's time ,yet they are not beneficial for children as they can achieve serious diseases by swalloing them as well as gives financial problems to parents.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, moreover, so, well, for example, in addition, as well as, in my view, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1570.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 308.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0974025974 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85452670384 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.597402597403 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 485.1 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 16.0721442886 50% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 38.0 20.2975951904 187% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 114.099737072 49.4020404114 231% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 196.25 106.682146367 184% => OK
Words per sentence: 38.5 20.7667163134 185% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.625 7.06120827912 165% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 28.0 5.01903807615 558% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138283739536 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0600361847476 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.042287369418 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0900822274743 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0414430989791 0.056905535591 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.8 13.0946893788 166% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.91 50.2224549098 66% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.1 11.3001002004 160% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.67 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.2 10.1190380762 170% => OK
text_standard: 22.0 10.7795591182 204% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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