In the last few decades, there have been more and more cases of famous people being hounded by the press. Some people think that famous people in the media should have no right to privacy. To what extent do you agree?
In recent years, cases of the press hounding famous people have became a controversial issue. I personally believe that although being famous, those people still have their own rights to privacy. Therefore, I totally disagree with the thinking that renowned people in the media should have no right to privacy.
To commence with, famous people are entitled to the same basic rights as any other individuals. This is because although there is a thought that they should be a model for their fans to follow, they must have the right to live their own life instead of being disturbed from other people. A typical example of this would be the case of a Korean singer, since being followed by the media frequently, he had been stressed, therefore led him to kill himself. As a result, it could be seen that if famous people do not have their own private life, they could be suffered from health problems such as stress, depression, or maybe death in some cases.
In addition to the analysis above, the media should focus on the professional achievements and public actions of celebrities rather than their private lives. If the media just only concentrates on their achievements and public actions, they could have a chance to understand exactly and find out more about how they achieve their success, and therefore, the teenagers could improve their knowledge and find out the most suitable method for them to improve themselves. For example, Jenny Huynh, a famous Vietnamese YouTuber who has a remarkable study result, especially achieving the IELTS band score of 8.0 at an early age. Thanks to the news related to the methods which she used to achieve this success, many young people have been motivated to get to great a result as she does.
In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above, I would disagree with the point of view that famous people should not have their own private lives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, so, still, therefore, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1576.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 322.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89440993789 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5055395592 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55900621118 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 479.7 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.5579840125 49.4020404114 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.333333333 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8333333333 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.91666666667 7.06120827912 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.355900672266 0.244688304435 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.152715006284 0.084324248473 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0927765747856 0.0667982634062 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.245897672375 0.151304729494 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.124542734379 0.056905535591 219% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.