Many animal species are becoming extinct due to human activities on land and in the sea. What are the reasons and solutions?
An increasing number of wild animals are put on the brink of extinction because of human actions on land and at sea. This essay discusses the possible reasons for this and steps that can be taken to tackle the problem.
To begin with, there are several reasons why wildlife is now more vulnerable than ever. The obvious reason is that because of the increasing population many forests are destroyed to make room for the expansion of residential areas and industrial areas. Therefore, it reduces a considerable number of wild animals because they lose their source of food and place to live. Furthermore, with increasing living standards, the demand for food and other materials for individuals is becoming rise rapidly. As a result, to meet people’s needs, many suppliers have used different risky ways to hunt wild animals such as electronic injection and guns. This led to the status of excessive chasing for both land species and marine species.
In addition, water pollution is also one of the most common causes leading to the decrease in marine creatures. The phenomenon of oceans is dump yards for all the plastic, chemical wastes from industries are quite familiar, which has endangered various sea organisms to the verge of extinction on global. Many tourists ruin the beautiful landscape and harm other sea organisms with their litter. For instance, whales are at risk of extinction, as their reproduction is affected by the radioactive materials dumped into the Pacific ocean.
To address these pressing problems, there are some solutions the government should consider thoroughly. Firstly, to prevent the overhunting situation, the authorities should build more national parks to provide shelter for animals to live and protect them from extinction. Secondly, stricter penalties should be imposed by the authorities in order to limit the contamination caused by industrial enterprises. Another effective approach is that enhance positive messages through posters and articles so as to raise people's awareness. As a result, they will have a fully cognition of the urgent issue and have responsibility for discouraging trading animals activities. For example, rhinos are mostly killed for its horn to make home decoration furniture, especially in Thailand. Therefore, people should boycott this item which will result in no need of poaching.
To summarize, natural habitat losses and illegal wildlife hunting and trafficking are the two main drivers of animal extinction. To tackle this issue, governments must protect and restore the natural ecosystems, and everyone should join hands to stop the illegal trade of endangered species.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 500, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...e messages through posters and articles so as to raise peoples awareness. As a result, t...
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Line 4, column 562, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('fully') instead an adjective, or a noun ('cognition') instead of another adjective.
... awareness. As a result, they will have a fully cognition of the urgent issue and have responsibi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2237.0 1615.20841683 138% => OK
No of words: 416.0 315.596192385 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37740384615 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82972515334 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 176.041082164 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.598557692308 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 699.3 506.74238477 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.9947215464 49.4020404114 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 106.523809524 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8095238095 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 3.9879759519 376% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168826307533 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0444250614137 0.084324248473 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.051091589307 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0922420869739 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0619894983384 0.056905535591 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.63 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 78.4519038076 170% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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