Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Both schools and parents are responsible for solving this problem. To what extent do you agree whit this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Nowadays many children have an unhealthy lifestyle because they spend most of their time watching television, playing videogames and computers. It seems that the will of playing outside with other kids or simply having fun running outside is disappeared. Unfortunately this happens because every child grows up surrounded by technology, so they prefer spending their time at home with every possible technological toy.
Certainly parents have a huge responsibility for this behaviour, because it's not like the oldest times anymore, when mums stayed at home as housewives and dads went to work all day. Today even women have the possibility to work and be independent, but this takes them away from their responsibility to their children. Mums don't look after their children as often as they did in the past, so kids can do and eat whatever they want, leading an unhealthy lifestyle.
Even mass media have a certain responsability to kids, because advertisements or advertising posters around the cities very often push them to buy and eat unhealthy food, like snacks, fries chips, hamburgers, chocolates and so on. Children are attracted by all these publicities, so they get used to eat junk food, to stay at home and to not practice sports.
On the other hand, schools try to teach children how having an healthy life, making them do physical education for example. In this way, kids learn to know about their bodies, they learn to move and to want to do more and more.
In coclusion, parents, schools and even all mass media should direct all children to a better lifestyle, explaining the importance of healthy food for our body and mental health. In addition, they should show how sport could help them not only to preserve a good health, but even to have a leisure time to related with other children and to share a common purpose. All these things can help kids to put aside technologies and videogames, and living a real and betterlife.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
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Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'used to eating'.
Suggestion: used to eating
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...hy food for our body and mental health. In addition, they should show how sport co...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, so, for example, in addition, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 13.1623246493 23% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1629.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 328.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96646341463 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73458954818 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579268292683 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 496.8 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 35.9644795177 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.307692308 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2307692308 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.76923076923 7.06120827912 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189013741651 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.071247175597 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0433729490114 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10970748338 0.151304729494 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0513666428917 0.056905535591 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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