Nowadays, the better the life is, the more children have an unhealthy way of life. This common phenomenon has raised a question that both schools and parents should take responsibility to tackle this issue and I totally agree with this idea for several reasons.
Many experts have pointed out that an unhealthy life style is a life without outdoor activities, using gadget devices for hours, consuming less vegetables and white meat. As my observation, the majority of children are always glued to smart devices and they have no interest in taking part in any outdoor activities or doing exercise, and consume a lot of fast food as well as have a high fat diet resulted in an increasing rate of obese and autism children. One of the main causes is parents today are so busy at work and they just spend less time on their offspring. Furthermore, the price of everything is rising vertically so parents have to sacrifice their time to earn for livelihood. For the children’s meal, they prefer giving children money to buy food at food stalls to cooking a high nutritious meal. Children who lack essential knowledge about society are easily trapped by attractive food which is low in nutrition and high in carcinogenic factors.
School and parents should take action immediately in order to save children from potentially severe diseases. One of parents should take an annual leave to spend time on monitoring their kids and help them making some exercises everyday so that it can be transformed into the daily habit of their offspring. Moreover, the time for gadgets should be limited and children should be encouraged social activities with friends and family. On the other hand, Teacher should warn and punish students heavily when they use illegal drugs.
To sum up, parents and school should be responsible for the children’s development as well as their health.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 140, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun vegetables is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...ing gadget devices for hours, consuming less vegetables and white meat. As my observ...
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Line 3, column 206, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to make' or 'make'.
Suggestion: to make; make
... on monitoring their kids and help them making some exercises everyday so that it can ...
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Line 3, column 530, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ts heavily when they use illegal drugs. To sum up, parents and school should be ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, moreover, so, well, as well as, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1561.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 313.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98722044728 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65932558657 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594249201278 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 481.5 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.9013819575 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.076923077 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0769230769 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.92307692308 7.06120827912 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234034304416 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0847122650054 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0597623649737 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160574553506 0.151304729494 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0663023093373 0.056905535591 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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