In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that the government should have the responsibility.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that the government should have the responsibility.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Submitted by machnha on Thu, 05/24/2018 - 14:09

It is true that the topic of overweight and illness among children has reached epidemic proportions in many countries in the modern age. In fact, it is argued that government should have the responsibility of the children’s health. I completely agree with this opinion.
Several reasons could explain why government have to responsibility for childhood obesity. First and foremost, curb the obesity epidemic significantly depend on advertising content on TV in the interesting time. This mean that, some advertisements about fat food such as KFC which may encourage children choose the unhealthy food instead of eating patterns that contain less sugar and fat. Therefore, it is said that responsible government has been control the advertising, They should show several of TV program about healthy diets as well as various diseases be able to link overweight to combat with deteriorating children health.
Apart from the practical concerns expressed above, I also believe that the most responsibility is the role of government in setting up regular exercise in school or office. In fact, as the world become more modern, people have found full up ways to deal with stress and entertainment, youngster lifestyle focus on laptop or tablet or social media. In addition, public facilities are not popular, especially in removed area which leads to the fact that people might not access physical activity. Consequently, government may be enact some policies likely to give people various methods to maintain a program of moderate physical exercise.
In conclusion, although it must be said that combating the childhood obesity crisis is very topical question nowadays, taking a long term, government decision is the factor key to an improvement in the quality of life of the whole community and less children are affected by obesity.

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...lity of life of the whole community and less children are affected by obesity.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, if, may, so, therefore, well, apart from, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as well as, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1549.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34137931034 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9898937979 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.620689655172 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 482.4 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.5896130582 49.4020404114 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.083333333 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1666666667 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.4166666667 7.06120827912 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195289678359 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.068132543862 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0448521776647 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115173368181 0.151304729494 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0570903728992 0.056905535591 100% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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