In many countries, children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider as it valuable experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. What are your opinion on this?
Nowadays, many people encourage children in completing paid works that are precious as to them, the experiences which children can gain from that kind of works are definitely precious. Although many may see it as a positive phenomenon, but this is not a trend without drawbacks. Both merits and demerits will be discussed in the forthcoming paragraphs before a reasonable conclusion can be drawn.
To begin with, nobody can deny that doing paid work gives a child the golden opportunity to have broaden view of life. It is a chance for children to discover and make inquiries about realistic world. Further and more importantly, children can get a lot of experiences in their workplaces, learn how to behave with their colleagues, find out the solutions to go through such stresses and strains in the modern life. Besides, that kind of paid work can help kids to develop their own relations, attain maturity, which contribute a significant role on deciding how they can succeed in their future work. Hence, I strongly believe that children who engaged in some kind of paid work can achieve plenty of huge benefits.
On the flip side, almost all of paid jobs in reality that employ children normally are washing dishes, receptionists or secretary who do stuffs including bringing drinks to his boss and photocopying documents or materials. Undoubtedly, that kind of paid job cannot bring advantages which are needed in their future work for a child. Another harmful ramification of this issue is that children can be harm in both physically and mentally. To exemplify, children are subject to sit down a stream of abuse; therefore, this leads to the fact that they can be hurt badly in their childhood. Their conditions are not as strong as adults are, and maybe it’s more than flesh and blood kids can bear.
After analyzing both the views, it is crystal clear that the disadvantages of doing paid jobs affected to a child outweighed the advantages can bring to them. From my point of view, adults, especially parents should not allow children to work from their early childhood. The step between being a kid and being an adult is a long-term; therefore, kids are deserved to grow up gradually.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 195, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun may seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much may', 'a good deal of may'.
Suggestion: much may; a good deal of may
...works are definitely precious. Although many may see it as a positive phenomenon, but th...
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Line 3, column 98, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'broadened'.
Suggestion: broadened
... a child the golden opportunity to have broaden view of life. It is a chance for childr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, hence, if, may, so, therefore, as to, kind of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1840.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 371.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95956873315 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73577337141 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568733153639 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1080733797 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.0 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1875 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.625 7.06120827912 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185117456981 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0657679055733 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0573840362614 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116792372601 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0495798066789 0.056905535591 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.