In many countries today, if people want to find work, they have to move away from their families and friends. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
Nowadays, with the improvement in technology or high salary in most big cities, a lot of people are going to move from their rural area to urban area in order to have some better jobs in some cities. It means that they have to move far away from their parents and their mates. This essay will demonstrate the benefits and disadvantages of this upward trend and my opinions for this point of view.
On the one hand, this trend will have huge advantages if people enjoy moving to cities for a job. First, most governments in most cities encourage building more houses, apartments for working in the city in order to make more money for the cities. More job opportunities are opened for employers to work. Next, some individuals can have high salaries or wages if they work in the cities. For example, in Vietnam, the salary for each month in agriculture in rural or suburban area is just $300 while it is $1000 in Hanoi - the capital city in Vietnam.
On the other hand, this problem can lead to the disadvantages. If more and more workers move to the city to have some better job opportunities, the governments will have to deal with the lack of public facilities from here. For example, this city need to build more schools, hospitals or markets, and the price for some goods there will increase more. Furthermore, most employers here will work in the city alone because they have moved away from their families or friends. This can be hard for some workers if they need from help because it is not any relatives in the city.
In conclusion, I agree that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages but I believe that people should move away to work in the city to have a better job. Citizens can improve in their life, their knowledge in that job and the funds for that city will be prosperous.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, so, while, for example, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1470.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 322.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5652173913 5.12529762239 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48986096863 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.459627329193 0.561755894193 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 467.1 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.2358113066 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4666666667 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 7.06120827912 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24603406884 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110461634134 0.084324248473 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0891910399281 0.0667982634062 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185688960456 0.151304729494 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.053864436974 0.056905535591 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 12.4159519038 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.28 8.58950901804 85% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 78.4519038076 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, so, while, for example, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1470.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 322.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5652173913 5.12529762239 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48986096863 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.459627329193 0.561755894193 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 467.1 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.2358113066 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4666666667 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 7.06120827912 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24603406884 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110461634134 0.084324248473 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0891910399281 0.0667982634062 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185688960456 0.151304729494 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.053864436974 0.056905535591 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 12.4159519038 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.28 8.58950901804 85% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 78.4519038076 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.