Many elderly people are no longer looked after by their families but are put in care or nursing homes. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?
The question of whether or not elderly people should be put in care or nursing homes or took care of by their children has been a matter of debate since the beginning of the twenty-first century. While there are some benefits of personally look after one's parents, i believe that it is better to send them to the community homes for elderly.
To begin with, there are many reasons why the amount of old people being sent to the nursing homes are increasing. First, many young people nowadays have a tight schedule, so by sending their parents to the nursing homes, the staff will make sure to take good care of their parents. this means that the young one can have more time to deal with their work without worrying about their senior. Second, many hospices, within the fund from a wide range of organisation, are providing welfare for the old and assure that one's parents will have a good experience at their place. For example places like Hoa Hong or Tuoi Gia are being built with the aim of giving the retiree a good place to live in with sufficient facilities.
On the other hand, there are several problem when permitting strange people to take care of one's parents. Firstly, besides those developed nursing homes, their are many places that do not provide enough care and sometimes treat the elderly people badly. For instance, many communities have been caught using violence toward the old people which later can result in the deteriorate in both physical and mental health of the old one. More than that, putting the old people in care or nursing homes, can reduce the amount of time that the whole family spend together. this situation will result in the degradation of the people's feeling towards their family.
To conclude, although spending the old generation to the nursing home may have potential problems, i belive that its advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, firstly, look, may, second, so, while, for example, for instance, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1564.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 324.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82716049383 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3764069225 2.80592935109 85% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555555555556 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 494.1 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.8583325277 49.4020404114 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.307692308 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9230769231 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.76923076923 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317441521018 0.244688304435 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117320430474 0.084324248473 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0652779182316 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190626899813 0.151304729494 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0642399937515 0.056905535591 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.