Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar which causes many health problems Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar Do you agree or disagree Give reason for your answer and inclu

Nowadays, many health-related problems arise because of the increased consumption of sugar in food and drinks. This is known to lead to a variety of health-associated problems such as obesity and diabetes. As a result, it is often considered by some that to encourage people to eat less sugar, the price should increase. In my opinion, I completely agree as it will reduce the strain on public health and government spending.

The reasons why high prices should be on sugar are many and varied. Firstly, it will put less strain on the hospitals when sugar is high-priced. This is because it will reduce the number of hospital visits and people coming down with sugar-associated problems such as diabetes. To illustrate, most young and adults are consuming junk foods that have high sugar content as they are easily accessible. When these foods are eaten over long periods, it leads to severe health problems, which can put a strain on hospital staffs as a result of treating diabetics. Therefore, increasing the price of sugar will encourage people to consume less.

Furthermore, if sugar is over-priced, it will reduce government spending on health. At the moment, every country allocates a significant amount of its budget to the health sector. In other words, increasing the price of sugar will reduce the number of people who come down with its related problems. Hence, the government will focus on more pressing issues, such as building roads, museums or schools. For instance, the majority of the country have free health insurance that costs the government. Thus, reducing sugar intake will greatly reduce health problems, and this will reduce spending by the government.

In conclusion, I believe there will be less strain on hospitals and reduced government spending if sugar is made costly.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 171, Rule ID: LESS_COMPARATIVE[1]
Message: Non-standard use of the comparative or superlative. Did you mean 'less numb'?
Suggestion: less numb
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, so, therefore, thus, well, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, in my opinion, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1633.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 327.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99388379205 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65600511588 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498470948012 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 496.8 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.8386000783 49.4020404114 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 90.7222222222 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1666666667 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.83333333333 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268011971713 0.244688304435 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101579134142 0.084324248473 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0638650122156 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18039316067 0.151304729494 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0668900400622 0.056905535591 118% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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