The world is suffering from the issue of obesity. The advancements made in technology, medicine and other industry is quite commendable but we as humans have become lazy and more prone to healthy diseases. The prompt suggests, products that contain a lot of sugar should be made more expensive to discourage their consumption. I strongly agree with this and will be discussing my viewpoints in the coming sections.
First of all, if any recent surveys about physical activities and health concerns, from any region of the world is observed, the alarming state of people's physical health will be evident. For example: cities here in Bangladesh, India or any other South-East Asian countries, have very limited open fields for children to play in. This, issue is further compounded by the fact that, foods and drinks nowadays have become more sugar heavy and children are getting addicted to these unhealthy foods and drinks. Consequently, the state of the fitness in children has been degrading more and more with each passing day. Furthermore, the issue is not limited to children only, the number of adults suffering from health complications like: heart diseases, diabetes etc. is exponentially rising. Unhealthy eating habits, especially sugar intensive diets are the main culprits behind this dire situation. Curbing sugar consumption by increasing the price of sugary products will hopefully solve this issue to some extent.
Second of all, if the price of sugary products are increased by adding more VAT(Value added tax), the funds that the government will receive will also increase. As a result, this increased fund can help facilitate more services for the citizens of the country. For example: in several countries of South-East Asia, unbearable traffic jams is a pervasive problem, which can only be solved with more roads and highways. Thus, funds from the tax of sugary products can be used for this purpose. Also, tax from sugary products can also be invested behind raising public awareness for physical health.
On the contrary, some might argue that, such a stance from the government will put farmers cultivating sugar in the line of fire. This issue, can be easily solved if the government subsidize farmers in the sugar market to transition to, growing more healthy crops. The losses incurred by the government can be overshadowed from the increased tax revenue from sugary products. Thus, we can conclude by saying that the advantages discussed above far outweigh the disadvantages of such a stance.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 207, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...azy and more prone to healthy diseases. The prompt suggests, products that contain ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, second, so, thus, for example, as a result, first of all, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2122.0 1615.20841683 131% => OK
No of words: 407.0 315.596192385 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21375921376 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68272266316 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 176.041082164 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540540540541 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 653.4 506.74238477 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 9.0 2.52805611222 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.9911903533 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.047619048 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.380952381 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.80952380952 7.06120827912 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222836962156 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0670963921628 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0645760338294 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141089584546 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0425687763726 0.056905535591 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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