In many parts of the world, children and teenagers are spending more and more of their time indoors. What do you think are the causes of this problem?
What measures could best be taken to solve it?
It is true that the young people, especially the juveniles or the children have been addicted to indoor activities, compared to outdoor activities. There are a number of reasons behind this phenomenon, and several solutions should be adopted by the governments to improve the situation.
There are two main reasons associated with this phenomenon. The most considerable cause is that the adolescents nowadays have been hooked on the modern devices such as smartphones or laptops. This could be explained by the fact that the high technology has engaged in many vital fields from education to economy development and affected to every aspect of people's life. As a result, the youth in overall have to wasted all their time staying at home instead of taking part in frequently outdoors.. Another compelling exposition for this cause is that the school curriculum has forced the student at a young age to spend time doing their homeworks to meet achievement requirements by school administration and student's parents. This is mainly due to the reality which can be seen that the school and parents are putting pressure on their children. This could be perfectly exemplified by the fact that there are 70% of juveniles in particular and the youth in general have been witnessed to be suffered from the mental illness due to being on the pressure, according to a research conducted. Consequently, the young people have spend time indoors in lieu of outdoors.
Fortunately, several measures could be implemented to alleviate this problem. The first solution could be from the school and the parent's cognitive. This could be done by the therapists who will play an vital role in persuading and raising the parent's awareness about the benefits of keeping their children to stamp out indoor activities. Therefore, the outcome for this solution could be highly appreciated and remained as an invaluable contribution to the youth's cultivation. The second solution requires the cooperation of the government and the ministry of education. This could be carried out by the number of justifiable methods which included reducing the unnecessary curriculum and school rota given by the minister and the leader of the ministry of education. This was successfully done by several development countries such as Poland. With the coordination between the government and the ministry of education, they have reached an agreement of alleviating some insignificant subjects at schools and finally succeeded in reducing children's time for indoor activities.
In conclusion, it is clear that there are various reasons for adolescents spending time indoors, and steps need to be taken by the government to tackle this problem. It can be predicted that with appropriate implementation of these suggested measures, this issue would likely be alleviated in the next 10 years.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, first, if, second, so, therefore, as for, in conclusion, in general, in particular, such as, as a result, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 13.1623246493 213% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 41.998997996 160% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.3376753507 264% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2401.0 1615.20841683 149% => OK
No of words: 454.0 315.596192385 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28854625551 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.20363070211 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97634150335 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 176.041082164 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 739.8 506.74238477 146% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.2170942734 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.05 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.2 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25355995067 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0813112540561 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0449162164861 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152041416972 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0490427251632 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 78.4519038076 162% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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