Many people go to university for academic study. More people should be encouraged to do vocational training because there is a lack of qualified workers such as electricians and plumbers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is true that many people prefer to pursue academic studies at university rather than to follow a vocational training course. While nobody can deny the need for university graduates, I totally agree that we should encourage more people to qualify as electricians, plumbers or other essential manual workers.
There are two important reasons why more workers must be trained in skilled professions such as plumbing or electrical work. Firstly, such workers are vital when new buildings are constructed or when existing buildings have to be renovated or simply maintained. Indeed, in many countries, a permanent
maintenance staff of skilled tradesmen is employed in hospitals, schools or museums, ensuring the safety of all who use the buildings. Secondly, in some developed countries, there is an existing imbalance in the economy, resulting in graduate unemployment, while at the same time there is a shortage of skilled
labour. Governments in those countries need, therefore, to work with employers to ensure that extra vocational training is provided.
More people must be encouraged to attend vocational training courses.The onus is on schools to incorporate relevant subjects into the curriculum, so that not all the emphasis is placed on preparation for academic study at university. Many boys and girls are not academically inclined, but this does not mean that schools should consider them as failures. For example, workshops in schools could provide an opportunity to learn ‘hands-on skills’, adapting the theory of the physics lessons to practical applications. Parents should also help their children to choose vocational careers, explaining the good employment prospects and
remuneration for manual workers with qualifications and skills
In conclusion, I agree that it is vital that we encourage more people to do vocational training because without such skilled workers, society cannot function
effectively.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 70, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1655.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 293.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.64846416382 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05017887823 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.610921501706 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 506.7 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.8470554447 49.4020404114 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.454545455 106.682146367 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6363636364 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.7272727273 7.06120827912 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.38176352705 160% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.361513782529 0.244688304435 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119265799038 0.084324248473 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0940764784868 0.0667982634062 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156191755606 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118509137843 0.056905535591 208% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.5 13.0946893788 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.79 12.4159519038 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.1 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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