Many think that religion should be taught in schools while others think it should be avoided Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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Many think that religion should be taught in schools while others think it should be avoided.
Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

There are two different views about whether religious subjects should be included in educational institutions. While many say this is a good addition, others believe it should be excluded from the school’s curriculum. In my view, although plenty of individuals are in agreement with this addition because of cutural comprehension, others' opinions state that it might take a huge toll on students’ studies due to a stressful schedule.
Students with a deep knowledge of religious education are easy to integrate into various societies with varied cultural backgrounds. They might learn that there are diverse moral and ethical values in each religion, which will aid them in correcting and adjusting their behaviors and gestures with their peers in their daily interactions. By understanding that those with Buddhism are prohibited from consuming meat for a couple weeks of the year, they can avoid accidentally offending or hurting others' feelings. As a result, with a high level of religious literacy, they can form strong and positive bonds in their community.

However, there is a major negative effect of this: students’ timetables might be demanding. With around ten to thirteen fundamental subjects in schools such as chemistry, physics, and math, to name a few, students’ six to eight hours of study as well as a huge amount of workload from projects and homework They are already under a high level of stress when dealing with such big work, and it could be worse both for their physical and mental health if religious courses are introduced. For example, they might encounter these unpleasant symptoms, including eye impairment, headaches, and mood swings, resulting from sleep deficiency from frequently working long nights on deadlines.

In conclusion, the inclusion of religious subjects in educational institutions is a topic that sparks debate. While some argue for its benefits in terms of cultural comprehension and fostering positive social interactions, others express concerns about the added pressure it may place on students' already demanding schedules.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1766.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 324.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.45061728395 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96008090284 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.626543209877 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 525.6 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.1113774729 49.4020404114 164% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.166666667 106.682146367 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.91666666667 7.06120827912 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140309832305 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0576748353801 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0764885010392 0.0667982634062 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0892993733366 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0810099927961 0.056905535591 142% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 13.0946893788 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.63 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.8 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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