With the development of technology, high-tech tools such as mobile phones and Internet are changing our world significant and they become extremely useful tools to help people to deal with jobs in every respect of our life. However, the elderly are not good at using such convenient tools so that just a few of them utilise Internet or smart phones. In fact, there are a wide array of ways they can use these useful tools.
Frome the point of my view, a smart phone is maybe the most useful tool for the aged people. Since family structure has been changed in current society, grandparents, parents and grandchildren living together as a extended family is impractical. Normally, separation living is the most common circumstance. A smart phone makes sure family members can hear and see each other any time any where. Family bonds reconnect via it, instead of waiting for the response for a long time. In addition, some aged people are likely to lose their ways when they are outside. It is a dangerous situation if he/she cannot get help on time. With the help of Internet and other tools such as GPS, it is easier to locate the lost people and solve this potential risk timely.
The elderly should be encouraged to use Internet and mobile phones. One possible solution to cope with this is to change their stereotype and help them to be willing to adopt the novelty. Aged people are always deemed to be slow learners. Admittedly, their energy, ambitions and motivations are not as the younger generation. This should not become the reason why they are reluctant to adopt changes. The government needs to help them to change their stereotype and make them use Internet and mobile phones positively. For example, my local community library offers Computer & Internet training for free. Participants can get one-to-one help in terms of computer and mobile technology, which benefits those who are not good at computer skills.
In conclusion, there are a variety of ways for aged people to use Internet and mobile phones so that the elderly need to change their stereotype and overcome the fear to high-tech tools with helping by the government.
- Mobile phones and the internet are very useful However its rare for the old people to use them In what ways can mobile phone and the internet be useful to the old people what could be done to encourage the old people to use mobile phone and internet 77
- Today, more and more parents depend on their children’s grandparents for childcare. Do you think this is a positive or negative trend? 67
- The older generations tend to have traditional ideas about how people should live, think and behave. Some people argue that these traditional ideas are not helpful in preparing the younger generations for modern life. Do you agree or disagree? 67
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'arrays'?
Suggestion: arrays
...smart phones. In fact, there are a wide array of ways they can use these useful tools...
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Line 3, column 213, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ts and grandchildren living together as a extended family is impractical. Normall...
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Line 3, column 385, Rule ID: ANY_WHERE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'anywhere'?
Suggestion: anywhere
...rs can hear and see each other any time any where. Family bonds reconnect via it, instead...
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Line 5, column 575, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... local community library offers Computer Internet training for free. Participants...
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Discourse Markers used:
['however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'for example', 'in addition', 'in conclusion', 'in fact', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.246305418719 0.247107183377 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.145320197044 0.155533422707 93% => OK
Adjectives: 0.118226600985 0.0946595960268 125% => OK
Adverbs: 0.051724137931 0.0501214627716 103% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0541871921182 0.0437548338989 124% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0935960591133 0.122226691241 77% => OK
Participles: 0.0270935960591 0.0403226058552 67% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.71749887767 2.80594681477 97% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0418719211823 0.0326793684256 128% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0862068965517 0.0861772015684 100% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0147783251232 0.021408717616 69% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.012315270936 0.011925033212 103% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2155.0 1933.35771543 111% => OK
No of words: 365.0 316.048096192 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.90410958904 6.12580529183 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.20517956788 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.331506849315 0.374742101984 88% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.224657534247 0.28420135186 79% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.167123287671 0.203846283523 82% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.101369863014 0.137316102897 74% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71749887767 2.80594681477 97% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.037074148 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512328767123 0.56093040696 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 54.9446756038 60.7387585426 90% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0891783567 124% => OK
Sentence length: 18.25 20.7743622355 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.9161752491 49.517814964 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.75 127.492653851 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.25 20.7743622355 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.45 0.814263465372 55% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 3.99599198397 100% => OK
Readability: 40.7157534247 49.1944974215 83% => OK
Elegance: 1.46078431373 1.69124875643 86% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.544948377954 0.332605444948 164% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0891237847545 0.102741220458 87% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0604274074098 0.0668466124924 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.466063703504 0.534860350844 87% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.189086009395 0.148594505496 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.193894274215 0.134430193775 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.136429094821 0.0742795772207 184% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.361938610254 0.324371583561 112% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.10107796733 0.0638462369009 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.393014843142 0.228012699653 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0838795990061 0.058150111329 144% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.68436873747 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.41683366733 117% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 5.90881763527 169% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.5751503006 155% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 1.9629258517 153% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 10.4468937876 163% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.