In the modern world, it is no longer necessary to use animals for food, clothing or medicine. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some people argue that it is high time people stopped using animals in the manufacturing of food, clothing or pharmaceuticals. While I opine that modern technology has reduced human"s reliance on animal products, I believe that it is too early to completely remove the functions of those goods in our daily life.
On the one hand, those who oppose the use of animals in making clothes is understandable. Artificial materials such as plastic fibres have been introduced into the texttile industry recently with unique perk such as supreme durability. What is more, scientists are constantly improving those synthetic materials to make them not only safer, environmentally friendly but also more comfortable to wear. Thus, the use of animal's leather in the garment industry should be excluded thoroughly.
Notwithstanding, it would be problematic for people to replace the role of animals in food industry and pharmacy. Despite the increasing popularity of vegetarian diet and its benefits, only meat or fish can provide human body with essential nutrients, such as proteins and fatty acids. In others words, it would cause a real problem if meat and fish are derived from people's meals. Furthermore,the role of animal in pharmeceutical industry is absolutely indispensable. animal testings not only enable scientist to ensure whether a new chemical substance is safe on human body not but may even discover medical breakthroughs such as blood tranfusion, which may save millions of lives.
In conclusion, although I consent that there is no longer need for animal in making clothes I strongly believe that animals are of pivotal importance regarding food or pharmeutical industries.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, may, regarding, so, thus, while, in conclusion, such as, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1437.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 265.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.42264150943 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14951724589 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.641509433962 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 460.8 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.1672169777 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.75 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0833333333 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.08333333333 7.06120827912 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19577984221 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0722047524054 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.069362391508 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132112715684 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0634171954997 0.056905535591 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.73 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.