At the moment, population of some courtiers includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with number of older people. Do advantages overweigh the disadvantages?
Currently, some countries have more younger population compared with the number of senior citizens. From my perspective, I think the interests of this phenomenon surpass its drawbacks.
There is no doubt that a large number of young people can benefit one society. First of all, this kind of population structure can relieve public welfare pressure. Majority of the young have their own occupations, which means they do not have to live with public benefits. In contrast, plenty of elder people depend on social welfare, increasing financial burden for one society. If this were the case, then governments would impose more tax to refill the financial gap. In addition, they can cover the workforce shortage. Based on a report from Auckland of University, it is the younger employee that many enterprises today prefer to hire. Because many think that they are more effective and creative compared with elder ones. Without such people, work efficiency in one firm will be affected.
In spite of these statements given above, there are some demerits for one country if there are more younger adults. To start with, it may cause higher crime rates. It is believed by some that this kind of people today mimic the violence pictures from computer games and TV shows, which may induce them to commit an offence. As a result, the crime rate among the young will rise. Another concern is that the local rent will increase due to house undersupply. Since a lot of the young cannot afford the down payment, which means they have to find apartment to rent. In other words, rental market may suffer from undersupply. Therefore, the local rent is more likely to grow.
To conclude, although I cannot fail to admit that more young people in one country may bring about some problems, I would like to embrace the idea that a large amount of young population is an important strength for a nation.
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- At the moment, population of some courtiers includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with number of older people. Do advantages overweigh the disadvantages? 78
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 32, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'younger' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: younger
Currently, some countries have more younger population compared with the number of ...
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Line 5, column 24, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
... drawbacks. There is no doubt that a large number of young people can benefit one society. F...
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Line 9, column 96, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'younger' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: younger
...e demerits for one country if there are more younger adults. To start with, it may cause hig...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, so, then, therefore, i think, in addition, in contrast, kind of, no doubt, as a result, first of all, in other words, in spite of, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1580.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 320.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9375 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46712565233 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571875 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 495.0 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.8503059964 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.0 106.682146367 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 20.7667163134 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16861396854 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.046375524505 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0598520456413 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113712988279 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0344646818999 0.056905535591 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 13.0946893788 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.