Money is important in most people's lives. Although some people think it is more important than the others. What do you feel are the right uses of money? What other factors are important for a good life?
Money plays an important role in our life. Many people believe that money is the most valued than everything else in their life. In my point of view, money is essential, but only a small part of many things (which are) responsible for our lives.
In one hand, the best way to use money is to invest in one’s self. If people have knowledge and position, they will know how to make money from everything. For example, the more foreign languages and soft skills you learn, the more people and cultures you can reach around the world, and you can even have more opportunities in finding a better job in the future. Besides, knowing how to use the money to help one have more opportunities and relationships in life is crucial. In particular, when something doesn’t go the way we want, money and relationships can conveniently help us make things work smoothly. Moreover, money helps people to take better care of their family’s life. For instance, they can tighten the family’s bond by taking everyone out for dinner or using the money to help their children enjoy a progressive and comprehensive education.
On the other hand, although no one can deny the importance of money in people's lives, money is not everything. Money cannot buy happiness. As proof, when people are busy making money to have a better life, they would probably forget to spend time with their families and children. The affection which is supposed to be there between family members will no longer exist. In addition, health is one of the most important factors. When people grow old, they will know clearly that health is more important than money once their life span is at risk. Like if you have marrow cancer but there is no cure for the disease, even though you have a lot of money, you can still possibly face the death. And when people die, they cannot bring money with them.
In conclusion, money is a very important thing in people’s lives, but money is not everything. We need to know how to equal best among money, happiness, health and many other factors to have the best life we can ever think of.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, if, moreover, so, still, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in particular, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1742.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 369.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72086720867 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56957161338 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.49864498645 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 541.8 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.10420841683 333% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8286150819 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.1 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.45 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.3 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.67935871743 184% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.377395562719 0.244688304435 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138873789596 0.084324248473 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0828235982861 0.0667982634062 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.263777386919 0.151304729494 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0445991739898 0.056905535591 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 13.0946893788 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 12.4159519038 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 8.58950901804 83% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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