The use of mobile phones in public places is as antisocial as smoking. Smoking is banned in certain places, so mobile phones should be banned in the same way. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In the age of advanced technology, the mobile phone is one of the most widely used technologies and it plays an important role in our lives. In my opinion, I believe that it is not as harmful as smoking, and people should be allowed to use mobile phones in public places.
I suppose that using mobile phones is not negative as smoking in public places.The main reason to ban smoking in certain places is passive smoking has a negative effect on public health, while mobile phones do not have much. Smoking does not only affect the smoker negatively. It also affects all the people around those who smoke because when people smoke in pubic the smoke travels everywhere through the air, and the negative effects of this smoke affects all living creatures such as a cancer and a heart disease. Unlike smoking, texting and calling do not cause fatal diseases to those who stand around mobile phone users. In other words, the levels of damaging effects that mobile phones and smoking have on society are not the same.
Moreover, I disagree with those who argue that mobile phones should be banned in public places. Today, mobile phone has become popular to most people since it is very convenient. The most advantage of having a mobile phone is you can communicate to your family and your friends no matter what where you are. For instance, you can contact easily to your friends by calling or sending messages everywhere without electricity. From the business’s point of view, it is obvious that mobile phones assist you in business a lot, such as, make schedule of working, surf the internet, and keep in touch with their companies. Moreover, you can relax with mobile phone’s applications, for example, play games, listen to music, or chat with your friends.
In conclusion, using mobile phones has more benefits rather than restricting as smoking. So I believe that the mild disadvantages could be easily limited by educating people regarding the mobile phone in public places .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, moreover, regarding, so, while, for example, for instance, i suppose, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1659.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 337.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92284866469 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52064234429 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53115727003 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 535.5 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.2867333952 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.6 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4666666667 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.6 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.504376742875 0.244688304435 206% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.179120518015 0.084324248473 212% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115338069105 0.0667982634062 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.304154630512 0.151304729494 201% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.017161447979 0.056905535591 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.