Multicultural societies, where people of different groups live together, can bring more benefits than drawbacks to a country. To what extent do you agree and disagree?
With the development of globalization, it is a common phenomenon that different people from different cultural areas live in the same community. It is argued that this will bring more pros than cons to a nation. In my opinion, I totally agree with it.
On the one hand, there are several advantages to people who live in a multicultural society. First of all, cultural assimilation will make people an increasing understanding of each other. Australia, for example, as an immigrant country, people from different countries gather together and work together to create a peaceful society. Besides, people would have unlimited opportunities to enjoy fantastic food from various restaurants such as Chinese, Thailand, and French etc. In addition, people who live in a multicultural society will more likely to deal with the businessman when running a global trade because they have many experiences in their daily lives.
On the other hand, some people worried that residents from various background will trigger some conflict. Discrimination, for instance, it sometimes happened between two different cultures. Additional, multicultural would also erode the local culture and culture identity in some ways. As there are a large number of local language are reduced every year. This will trigger people to lose a sense of belonging.
In conclusion, although there are few disadvantages when people of varying background live together, the certain benefits from multicultural society cannot be ignored. I strongly agree that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages when people live in a multicultural society which will bring us a better future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: many; numerous
...ure identity in some ways. As there are a large number of local language are reduced every year. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, if, so, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1406.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 255.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.5137254902 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06821083434 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 176.041082164 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.572549019608 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 448.2 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.2668769711 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.7333333333 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.33333333333 7.06120827912 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228289147778 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0746011424247 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0501835162061 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145271982917 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0532946010077 0.056905535591 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.3 50.2224549098 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.38 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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