museums are still helpful despite the help of techonology. Agree or disagree?
In today’s world, with the assistance of technology, especially the social media, people have gained access to a myriad of information online, including those artistic masterpieces in museums or galleries. This fact has aroused a protracted debate over the necessity to maintain these buildings as a result. However, I am against this statement due to several existing benefits of the museums.
Although it may be true that the presence of the Internet has provide people with the clearer view of faraway events and inventions, there is no denying the eye-opening experience of watching these in real life, which is one of the functions of museums. When people have chances to go to galleries, they are not only well-equipped with wider view over these historical objects, such as their histories or author but they will also be presented by experts in ways that are more fascinating than the articles online. For example, though now people all over the world can see the painting of Monalisa via numerous means of communication, it is recorded that nearly twenty thousands of people visit the museum annually just to have a direct view of this masterpiece.
Besides broadening the visitors’ horizons, these constructions also offer many benefits. Through the trips to the museum, people also stand the chance of finding the like-minded group of people, which, in turn, expands their social cycle and helps them avoid the monotonous life of sticking to the screens. Moreover, gallery is pivotal way to preserve these historical and worldwide value so their existence is unarguably indispensable. Thanks to museums, generations might then be able to find the magnificence of arts.
In short, though the technology may conveniently supply people with handy information, I am strongly convinced that museums have both educational and social advantages that will have positive impact on the well-being of people all around the world.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use past participle here: 'provided'.
Suggestion: provided
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Message: Use a singular form of the numeral here: 'twenty thousand'.
Suggestion: twenty thousand
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, well, for example, in short, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1636.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29449838188 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94100873302 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.62783171521 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 504.9 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.419804606 49.4020404114 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.727272727 106.682146367 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0909090909 20.7667163134 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.72727272727 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0535249759422 0.244688304435 22% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0187628889352 0.084324248473 22% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0327809478247 0.0667982634062 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0340084764232 0.151304729494 22% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0200290647132 0.056905535591 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.08 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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