New technologies have changed the way children spend their free time Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages

In the contemporary era, the way children spend their leisure time has changed by the frantic pace of developing new technologies. Although there are benefits involved in this trend, the drawbacks acquiring to children are by no means negligible.
On the plus side, new technologies influence in shaping children's abilities. To begin with, it extends the children's perspective and fosters their intellectual capability. Simply put, technologies like gadgets that almost have challenging games, stimulate children's curiosity and creativity. For example, my colleague's son who has worked with gadgets from an early age could write a game's programs with just 8 years old. furthermore, technologies such as a computer, the internet, games improve children's solve programming ability. For example, trying to pass a level and get a higher score in a game, get challenge children and prepare them for facing more significant problems in life.
On the other hand, new technologies make children more alone and dissociable. They can cause a gap between the younger generation and their parents. Also, they prevent peer interaction and hinder social development. take my cousin as an example, who spends all his time playing online games and does not have any friends in real life.
Moreover, gadgets make children less active which can lead to many health problems such as obesity. They boost also tension and higher stress level among children. More and more children with mental disorders make parents initiate programs to eliminate children's use of electrical technologies.
To conclude, children's uses of new technology in their free time have both advantages and disadvantages. Although it boosts their creative abilities and extends their horizon, it also could cause irreversible health problems for them.

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Average: 6.7 (2 votes)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
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...eraction and hinder social development. take my cousin as an example, who spends all...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, moreover, so, for example, such as, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 13.1623246493 15% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1529.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 279.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48028673835 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91153728636 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.616487455197 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 468.0 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.1916017074 49.4020404114 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 89.9411764706 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4117647059 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.35294117647 7.06120827912 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.328411901839 0.244688304435 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109785767422 0.084324248473 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115162259844 0.0667982634062 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195158182034 0.151304729494 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0831411721688 0.056905535591 146% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 50.2224549098 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 421, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Furthermore
...a games programs with just 8 years old. furthermore, technologies such as a computer, the...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 433, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rams with just 8 years old. furthermore, technologies such as a computer, the in...
^^
Line 2, column 467, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rmore, technologies such as a computer, the internet, games improve childrens so...
^^
Line 3, column 216, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Take
...eraction and hinder social development. take my cousin as an example, who spends all...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, moreover, so, for example, such as, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 13.1623246493 15% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1529.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 279.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48028673835 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91153728636 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.616487455197 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 468.0 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.1916017074 49.4020404114 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 89.9411764706 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4117647059 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.35294117647 7.06120827912 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.328411901839 0.244688304435 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109785767422 0.084324248473 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115162259844 0.0667982634062 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195158182034 0.151304729494 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0831411721688 0.056905535591 146% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 50.2224549098 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.