nonemployment is getting increasingly serious in many countries. Some people think students only need to get primary education, while others think secondary education is necessary. What 's Your opinion?
There is no doubt that education is an indispensable need in a developed community. Although some people recommend working after finishing primary education, others believe that secondary education is mandatory. I, personally, support the latter view. In this essay, I argue why students are better qualified for work after they finish high school.
To begin with, the high school provides students with well-rounded knowledge and self-discipline. This is because they learn a variety of subjects and learn how to be a commitment to work as well as to respect the time. As a consequence, they have a privilege to get work after graduation over those who just attended primary school. In a study conducted in the USA, secondary school graduates showed to get much higher job opportunities when compared with those who got only primary education. I think that if the worker is not well-educated and skillful, his performance and productivity at work will be greatly affected. Thus, secondary education is needed to provide society with knowledgeable and competent persons.
Furthermore, after finishing primary school, the pupil is still immature to work. The age of the student after completing primary education is 13 years in most countries. In many developed communities, children at this age are not legally allowed to work. In my opinion, until the age of 18 years, children ought to study hard to improve their skills and, at the same time, enjoy their childhood. If children less than 18 years old worked and left school, they would face many psychological problems in the future. Therefore, primary school graduates are not allowed to work not only because they lack knowledge but also because of immaturity.
In conclusion, I believe that secondary education is mandatory before employment because students are still immature. Moreover, in secondary school, they need to get a well-rounded education.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, moreover, second, so, still, therefore, thus, well, as to, i think, in conclusion, no doubt, as well as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1623.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 304.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33881578947 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99444748163 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549342105263 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.6213931224 49.4020404114 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 90.1666666667 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8888888889 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.94444444444 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219852984061 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0732172726434 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0615264390585 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148888707363 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0377538195472 0.056905535591 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 50.2224549098 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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