Not many young people in countries in the world go to and enjoy concerts and plays. Why is this the case? Should they be encouraged to attend and learn more about this genre of art?
It is obvious that in many nations, there are few youngsters who attend and enjoy musical shows. There are many reasons for this phenomenon and I am of the opinion that they should be motivated to go to live concerts.
To begin with, one of the main causes for this problem is expensive ticket price. In many concerts and plays, especially those performed by famous artists and bands, the cost of ticket is pushed up too high. What I mean is that most young people are not being able to afford as they are mainly students or fresh graduates who are generally struggling to make ends meet. Therefore, paying a large sum of money for live performances seems to be financially burdened. In addition, a wide range of youngsters are afraid of being in a crowd. Having to stand in a place full of strangers to enjoy music makes them feel suffocated, breathless as well as their vision is also limited. What’s more, many music performances last for even four to five hours, which make the young people stand for a long time and be very exhausted.
However, it is worth encouraging the young generation to take time to learn about the beauty of this genre of art and there are a variety of ways for this. Firstly, to attract more youngsters, the organizers should reduce some unnecessary additional charges. Secondly, the way forward could be to organize shows with limited guests to make sure all of the audience can have best view of the stage and the performers. Finally, personal seats should be provided to make it more comfortable for the audience to enjoy the concert.
In conclusion, not many youngsters participate in live concerts and plays due to reasons such as price, crowd and seats. From my perspective, the organizers and government should take actions to solve these problems.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 345, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
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Line 3, column 369, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'have the best'.
Suggestion: have the best
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, however, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, i mean, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1482.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 311.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7652733119 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61820459394 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588424437299 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 459.9 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.6526068693 49.4020404114 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 98.8 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7333333333 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.93333333333 7.06120827912 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.331166420145 0.244688304435 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0968970995879 0.084324248473 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.078433899276 0.0667982634062 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191209946641 0.151304729494 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.07175580676 0.056905535591 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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