Nowaday, young people admire sports stars though they often do not set a good example. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
The specific issue of whether the admiration of millions of youngsters towards sports athletes who are often poor role models is a negative trend or not. Views on this issue vary from person to person. I am a firm supporter of the perspective that this trend has a detrimental effect on young generation and society.
First and foremost, sports star – oriented a bad example has the power to adversely affect the thinking capability as well as ability of the youth and instill negative or destructive behavior and thinking patterns. Paradoxically, youngsters tend to look up to all the actions of the stars regardless of whether these actions are beneficial or not. Anecdotal evidence has shown that Batolle is a player, who gains attention and fame through scandals as well as PR stunts. This made many young people imitate that causes a dangerous wave for the awareness and development.
What is more, idolizing sportsmen who are the wrong ideal has an ability to increase the juvenile delinquency. Obviously, tons of sports stars are investigated about the use of dope such as cocaine, drug, and hashish, thereby leading to youngsters’ curiosity to try. Needless to say, the young generation is likely to become offenders by dint of these dope, which is banned usage.
Finally yet importantly, unknowingly or knowingly, although setting a bad example, sports stars might be still a role model for their career. Take Ronaldo, a world-class footballer, as a typical example, he stands out like an excellent player by virtue of diligence and determination for each of matches. Fans have a potential to learn a lot from their good personalities and characteristics.
From what has discussed above, one can reach a conclusion that it is hard for both sides to come to an agreement for this win-win situation, I still strongly hold onto the view that the proclivity of admiring and adoring these stars may pose a wide range of adverse effects on the young generation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, look, may, so, still, well, such as, as well as, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1629.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 322.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05900621118 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9726469578 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.614906832298 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 515.7 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.4498738673 49.4020404114 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.357142857 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.78571428571 7.06120827912 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 23.0 5.01903807615 458% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193868431902 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0558484946526 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0391518465293 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0942909503975 0.151304729494 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0327186655224 0.056905535591 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.24 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.