Nowadays celebrities are mainly famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To what extent do you agree and disagree
Nowadays, it is inevitable that there are more and more celebrities are well known for their glamorous styles rather than due to their hard working. Much as I agree that these individuals are likely to have negative impact on youngsters, I still wholeheartedly believe that there have been others famous people who can play an integral part in the cognitive development of children.
On the one hand, there is no denying that in the world today, many people achieve fame much easier without really working on it. They can be a famous young star in social media just by a set up picture or video or they have appeared in gossip magazines or on a reality television program. And they set erroneous standards of what is beautiful and talented, which can make youngsters idolize and emulate them. A typical example is Paris Hilton who is rich and famous for the wrong reasons. She is often spotted to drink alcohol or smoke and her promiscuous behaviors promote the idea that elegant appearances, wealthy and media profile are much more crucial than hard work and good characters.
On the other hand, it is obvious that there have been many excellent celebrities whose accomplishments make them role models for the young. A great number of artists, actors, and singers have applied themselves to develop skills and capacities and manifested great attempts, determination and ambition which are the most requisite criteria for success in their chosen fields. Their meaningful messages to youngsters can be a enormous inspirational source to develop their talents through application and perseverance.
To sum up, I strongly argue that despite of negative effect from some idols, youngsters also can find it possible to follow their passion, their dreams enthusiastically thanks to a lot of self-made celebrities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, really, so, still, thus, well, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1520.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13513513514 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85112518317 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.614864864865 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 473.4 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.0633191179 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.181818182 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9090909091 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.27272727273 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222402513526 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0802138820083 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0540394217971 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126596245007 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0356197149856 0.056905535591 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.57 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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