Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
In recent years stars are well known for their glamour and prosperities than for their attainments,which is setting a negative example for young people. In my opinion,I agree that the mystique and wealth of famous personalities are less impotant than their achievements.
Firstly,there are many VIPs who are only known for their riches and lust.These kind of stars negatively impact the young minds to think that only money and looks can make a person famous.There are also some celebrities who never mind enaging in awful acts.For Instance,Priyanka chopra often posts glamourous pictures of her wearing fashion designer costumes.She is also spotted smoking and drinking in the public by media.This kind of glamourous lifestyle can definitely create a bad influence for young people.They only see the superficial side of being famous and do not understand or appreciate the efforts that go into making one successful.
Secondly,there are some celebrities who are known for their consistent hardwork and determination.For example,Sachin tendulker is a reknowned cricket star as he is known for talent.Infact, he is constantly training and working to build up his stamina and give his best on the field.Therefore,he is extremely inspiring for children and young adults as sachin shows them that it is essential to fight for our dreams by working hard and being a perseverant person.Thus several celebrities can be a great role model for today's society as they teach people pertinent lessons.
In conclusion,ypoung adults can be negatively influenced by celebrities who just flaunt their riches and lust.However,in my opinion there are also some other stars ho can teach us a valuable lesson by the virtue of their accomplishment in life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 23.0 41.998997996 55% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1472.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 273.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39194139194 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.41722709168 2.80592935109 122% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.600732600733 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 449.1 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 16.0721442886 31% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 54.0 20.2975951904 266% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 218.906738133 49.4020404114 443% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 294.4 106.682146367 276% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 54.6 20.7667163134 263% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 30.0 7.06120827912 425% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 24.0 5.01903807615 478% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312913270034 0.244688304435 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.198750382314 0.084324248473 236% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0926907147353 0.0667982634062 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20890955605 0.151304729494 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.127161062926 0.056905535591 223% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 31.3 13.0946893788 239% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 16.67 50.2224549098 33% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 15.9 7.44779559118 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 24.4 11.3001002004 216% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.87 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.54 8.58950901804 123% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 9.78957915832 199% => OK
gunning_fog: 23.6 10.1190380762 233% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 24.0 10.7795591182 223% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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