Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
there is little room for doubt that entertaining industry is one of the fastest-growing industries in the world. However, along with this trend is the uprising number in celebrities are earning more fame for their outlook and wealth than for their accomplishment. it caused controversial debate that this is a bad image for the youngs. this issue should be viewed from multiple perspectives.
On the one hand, many people do achieve fame without really working for it. they may have inherited money from parents, married a famous or wealthy person, or they may have appeared in gossip magazines or on a reality TV programme. A good example would be Paris Hilton, who is rich and famous for the wrong reasons. She spends her time attending parties and nightclubs, and her behaviour promotes the idea that appearance, glamour and media profile are more important than hard work and good character. The message to young people is that success can be achieved easily, and that school work is not necessary.
On the other hand, there are at least as many celebrities whose accomplishments make them excellent role models for young people. actors, musicians and sports stars become famous idols because they have worked hard and applied themselves to develop real skills and abilities. they demonstrate great effort, determination and ambition, which is required for someone who wants to be truly successful in their chosen field. An example is the actor and martial artist Jackie Chan, who has become world famous through years of practice and hard work. this kind of self-made celebrity can inspire children to develop their talents through application and perseverance.
In conclusion, it seems to me that the influence of celebrities on young people can be positive as well as negative.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, look, may, really, so, well, at least, in conclusion, kind of, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1520.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 292.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20547945205 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78013858937 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.61301369863 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 452.7 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.6587170372 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.333333333 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4666666667 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.73333333333 7.06120827912 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308203329858 0.244688304435 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0952881964371 0.084324248473 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.086741728926 0.0667982634062 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171198244068 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106840819886 0.056905535591 188% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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