Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
In present time people are more interested towards sophisticated and glamorous kind of living which can be a reason that people are more attracted towards the wealth a celebrity has and the way they carry themselves rather than their career achievements. This might not send a good message to the society where there are many people who look up to them for inspiration.
Nowadays as celebrities are more emphasizing on the work that can lead to generate more revenue for them, they prefer to do those kinds of task be it advertisement related to product which are not healthy to consume or promoting those practices that won’t be benefiting our society. They tend to create those examples which are not great for young brains of our country, it might be possible after watching those kinds of advertisement they could get influenced to do stuff which they shouldn’t. For Eg:- We can see that in lot of movies as the actor is smoking cigarette many people get influenced by them try these tobacco products which is not beneficial for their health.
We can also see that teenagers after watching the living standards of celebrities aspire to be like them due to which current generation have a diverse thinking. Nowadays we can see that students are participating a lot in extra-curricular activities like drama, sports, art & craft etc. Earlier this was not the case, people were more into studying due to which somewhere overall development was missing. Moreover, there are youngsters who are solely investing their effort in activities like acting or sports under the influence of their favorite celebrities due to which they are not giving required effort in studies which in turn is not good.
It can be inferred that youngsters should look at the journey of celebrities, how they became what they became and get influenced by those which will help them understand how to achieve those goals which they aspire for and don’t think too much about the glamour and wealth these positions brings to the table because thinking about these byproducts won’t help in any way rather it will spoil th
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, look, moreover, so, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 7.30460921844 287% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 46.0 24.0651302605 191% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1779.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 354.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02542372881 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75316628959 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519774011299 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 541.8 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 20.2975951904 172% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 86.8055297778 49.4020404114 176% => OK
Chars per sentence: 177.9 106.682146367 167% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.4 20.7667163134 170% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.3 7.06120827912 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177284523506 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0770542702292 0.084324248473 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0364944953836 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113589048674 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0471585344228 0.056905535591 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.0 13.0946893788 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.41 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.49 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 9.78957915832 199% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.1190380762 158% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 10.7795591182 186% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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