Nowadays the crime rate is increasing especially among teenagers. What are the reasons behind it? How can we reverse this trend? What punishment methods should be used, on your opinion?
The crime rate is not like as the past today, it is raising up day by day. Also, we can see there is more young people who is guilty. The main reason of it is a money. Teenagers need a money to buy something but if they and their family don't have it, these people will start steal it from others. Besides, sometimes people can do crime for fun or dare each other. They can fight with others just for nothing.
On of the other important reason is their family culture. İf their family do crime things, children will learn someting from their parents or siblings. They could think it is a normal thing like everyone do. On the other hand families should care about their kids, they have to teach them what is good or bad also they should spend time with their children. Moreover parents must be control their kids even kids are over than 18. Families should ask them questions about their friends otherwise what are they doing with their friends. Bad friends are other effect fot teenager crime rate.
If we want to decrase this trend, we should start from education. We have to teach to young people what is bad for them also for society but in these days most of schools are teaching only maths or science. It is need o be change in order to raise a good, kind and respectfull generation. Besides goverment should educate parents with free conferences or TV programs. When parents are educated about how they care about their children, young people will be change soon.
Apart from all these, there is a another point, a "punishmet" after the crime for teenagers. Most of countries have a child prison for young people who is guilty. It is not bad punishment method but we should gain these people again because they are young. When they will be free, they must be a good person. Therefore we can change child prions to crime education centers. These centers should look like a prison for punishment while educating guily teenagers. Young people can stay at there like a 6 days in a week and they can spend 1 day with their families at outside. But after it they have to come back for another week. Duration should not be long but it should be depends on crime.
To conclude we need to revere crime trend of teenager crime rating with educate them and their families. Also punishment have to becarefull for gain these people again for society.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'money'.
Suggestion: money
...who is guilty. The main reason of it is a money. Teenagers need a money to buy somethin...
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'money'.
Suggestion: money
...reason of it is a money. Teenagers need a money to buy something but if they and their ...
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Suggestion: Moreover,
... should spend time with their children. Moreover parents must be control their kids even...
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Message: After 'Most of', you should use 'the' ('Most of the countries') or simply say ''Most countries''.
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Suggestion: Therefore,
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Suggestion: Also,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, look, moreover, so, therefore, while, apart from, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 13.1623246493 198% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 25.0 7.85571142285 318% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 24.0651302605 212% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1941.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 424.0 315.596192385 134% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57783018868 5.12529762239 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.2949640237 2.80592935109 82% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.469339622642 0.561755894193 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 580.5 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 16.0721442886 180% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.1041463844 49.4020404114 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 66.9310344828 106.682146367 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.6206896552 20.7667163134 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.13793103448 7.06120827912 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.01903807615 259% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 3.9879759519 351% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199658617916 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0635162816696 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0480216953466 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12630603047 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0285223688384 0.056905535591 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.5 13.0946893788 57% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 50.2224549098 148% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 11.3001002004 57% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.69 12.4159519038 70% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.57 8.58950901804 76% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 9.78957915832 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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