Nowadays, a large amount of advertising is aimed at children. Some people think this can have negative effects on children and should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
nowadays advertising is ever-increasing popular among people of all ages, particularly among children. Some people hold an opinion that it can have negative effects on children and should be banned. However, from my perspective, I disagree with those people and think it has many benefits to children.
Those who support banning advertisements on children are not misguided that it would lead impulsive consumption, which means children would buy numerous goods than they actually need due to they don’t have enough self control. In addition, tons of advertisements always tend to highlight some properties the products have while ignore the drawbacks, thereby customers usually are victims to meet businessman’desire to make a fortune.
However, the disadvantages mentioned above and be advertised. children can be rigorously supervised by their parents. For example, parents can limit their living expenses to reduce the purchase of unnecessary items. Furthermore, advertising industry can be controlled by our government. To be more specific, government can take a series of measures to strictly control the reliability which means it can make people rely on those products without doubt.
Actually, advertisements around us have many advantages. Through watching some advertisements, it can make children learn more about them and pick the bast one among similar shops. In the past, people have less choices to buy goods because they don’t know other place can buy them without marketing. In addition, advertising on children promote the economy at an alarming pace. Actually,in every family, expenditures on children take significant segment and thereby children marketing have a potential profit, which has been discovered by lots of businessman.
In summary, though lots of advertisements on children have some drawbacks,it can be avoided through taking some actions and it has tons of advantages far weights the disadvantages
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, furthermore, however, if, so, while, as to, for example, in addition, in summary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1664.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 293.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.67918088737 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.27450169574 2.80592935109 117% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590443686007 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 517.5 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.7071393307 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.0 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3125 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.625 7.06120827912 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.366197037298 0.244688304435 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128654874996 0.084324248473 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0906428669491 0.0667982634062 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216600652251 0.151304729494 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0886283132054 0.056905535591 156% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.28 50.2224549098 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.66 12.4159519038 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.