Nowadays many families have both parent working. Some working parents believe other family members like grandparents can take care of their children. While other think that child care center provide the best care. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In this present era, some of families both parents have busy schedules due to their work and they think that, retire family member have to take care of their offspring. Whereas, other believe that they migrate their children to child care centre to provide such facilities. Here, I would like to discuss both views and share my own opinion in the upcoming paragraphs.
To begin with, sometime old people are retired from their work and prefer to stay at home. For example, they are keenly keep touch with their children and teach them some adequate in traditional way. So that they bring joy and prosperity in children and in old people’s life by spending their leisure time with each other’s and it provide optimum opportunity to reduce their generation gap. Moreover, elders have much experience that how to take care of their juvenile in this modern world. For instance, they can share their experience among their teenagers and also share their heart talks related to their life. In result, senior citizens play an vital role to uplift the standard of their children life.
On the flip side, child care centre create enormous gap in offspring and parents relationship. To exemplify, they donot know their moral values and they also stay away from the love and effections of their parents. Therefore, it is biggest menance that offspring give more preference to child care centre instead of their parents. Last but not the least, they also indulge in the bad activities in the child care centre. For instance, they can do work according to their choice and they also take their culture on the back seat. While spending their life in child care centre. As a result, parents ruin their children life by migrating their juvenile to child care centre. Which would be detrimental for their offspring’s as well as parents.
To conclude, it is vividly said that, every coin has two espects. But, I strongly believe that, parents have to spend their quality of time with their children to make their bondings strong.
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Pronoun: 51.0 24.0651302605 212% => Less pronouns wanted
Unique words percentage: 0.529239766082 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 22, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'some of', you should use 'the' ('some of the families') or simply say ''some families''.
Suggestion: some of the families; some families
In this present era, some of families both parents have busy schedules due to...
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Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...r have to take care of their offspring. Whereas, other believe that they migrate their ...
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Line 3, column 121, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'kept'.
Suggestion: kept
...y at home. For example, they are keenly keep touch with their children and teach the...
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Line 3, column 342, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'provides'?
Suggestion: provides
...sure time with each other's and it provide optimum opportunity to reduce their gen...
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
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Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...so take their culture on the back seat. While spending their life in child care centr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, whereas, while, for example, for instance, as a result, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
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Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 24.0651302605 212% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1694.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 342.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95321637427 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43013945785 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529239766082 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 511.2 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.2634910043 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.1578947368 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.68421052632 7.06120827912 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.348705527223 0.244688304435 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12210863867 0.084324248473 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0901807990447 0.0667982634062 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.245682453311 0.151304729494 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.148571228693 0.056905535591 261% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.0946893788 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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