Nowadays more and more children acquire unhealthy eating habits. Why is it happening? What can be done to solve this issue?
Lifestyle has undergone dramatic changes over recent decades. Presently, modernity has brought great changes in the methods of food preparation and recipes. It is noticed that eating habits of children are quite awful in this modern world. As a result, they are becoming victims of various health concerns. Here, i would like to account for causes and remedies to address this problem.
There are multifarious causes behind this issue. First and foremost, busy lifestyle of parents is responsible behind it. To demonstrate, working parents are unable to serve homemade foods to their children even ...
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Essay evaluation report
There is widespread availability of snacks
There is a widespread availability of snacks
school canteens also serve junk foods and beverages to the children who go to schools. Hence, they have been addicted to eat unhealthy food
Description: 'they' refers to what? Be sensitive to use pronouns.
Initially Parents need to be watchful towards eating habits of their wards. They must aware children about the importance of healthy food and eating on proper time.
Description: 'they' refers to what? Be sensitive to use pronouns.
flaws:
Avg. Sentence Length: 13.667 21.0 //try to develop more complex/compound sentences to make the length of sentences longer. for example:
First and foremost, busy lifestyle of parents is responsible behind it. To demonstrate, working parents are unable to serve homemade foods to their children even on proper time.
revised:
First, working parents who are unable to serve homemade foods to their children even on proper time are responsible because of the busy lifestyles.
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because of short length of sentences, Automated_readability_index is low too, so e-grader gave a low score.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 287 350
No. of Characters: 1526 1500
No. of Different Words: 175 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.116 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.317 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.673 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 125 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 91 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 64 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 13.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.476 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.476 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.273 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.495 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.046 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 314, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ctims of various health concerns. Here, i would like to account for causes and re...
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Line 3, column 235, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...ir children even on proper time. Hence, everyday, children are offered fast food which i...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Further,
...bles instead healthy homemade food. Further emphasizing on my view, school canteens...
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Line 7, column 74, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... taken to curb this happening. Initially Parents need to be watchful towards eati...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, if, so, therefore, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1580.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 287.0 315.596192385 91% => OK
Chars per words: 5.50522648084 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75416531024 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.609756097561 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 486.9 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.2975951904 64% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.127815381 49.4020404114 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 75.2380952381 106.682146367 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.6666666667 20.7667163134 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.28571428571 7.06120827912 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168445087584 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0493583058148 0.084324248473 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0449459024627 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0927663787711 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0345023957862 0.056905535591 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.82 50.2224549098 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.09 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 9.78957915832 51% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.1190380762 71% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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