Nowadays most people learn academic study in university, but others think we should encourage to learn vocational skills more, do you agree or disagree?
It is sometimes argued that academic education in the university plays a vital role in student life. However, others hold different views that vocational skills should be considered at the same level as academic study. Personally, I strongly agree with the former opinion.
It is understandable why some believe that vocational school is as important as educational school. Their rationale is that students will be provided practical knowledge that can be applied directly to their job. Take hair stylists, for example, barbours only need to learn a series of courses relating directly to their job and can be used immediately after graduating. However, I believe this is an outdated view. In fact, although vocational education is realistic, it only provides a limited range of knowledge. In order to have a secure well-paid jobs, learners have to vary themselves with a wide range of information across many aspects of life. This will help them improve not only their educational knowledge but also open up new opportunities to develop their career.
In addition, I am strongly convinced that university education contributes many benefits for students in the future. This is because the university provides a wide range of information to help them have a deeper understanding of their future job and also other aspects of life. Take managers, for example, academic study improves student awareness about leader ability not only knowledgeable but also technical as well. As a result, it can be a major boost for their life. Furthermore, it can benefit the nation by providing well-trained talents for the country as the revolution of one country really need supports from talented people.
In conclusion, there are sufficient grounds to reject the view that vocational skills should be treated equally to educational skills. It is my genuine belief that academic knowledge contributes greater benefits for students in the future.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 553, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'job'?
Suggestion: job
...ge. In order to have a secure well-paid jobs, learners have to vary themselves with ...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, really, so, well, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, of course, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1630.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30944625407 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9370958184 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.540716612378 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 531.0 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.4519022091 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.8823529412 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0588235294 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.47058823529 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.11438686424 0.244688304435 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0395782405714 0.084324248473 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0417940051883 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0914693016695 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0541759735237 0.056905535591 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.22 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 553, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'job'?
Suggestion: job
...ge. In order to have a secure well-paid jobs, learners have to vary themselves with ...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, really, so, well, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, of course, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1630.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30944625407 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9370958184 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.540716612378 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 531.0 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.4519022091 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.8823529412 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0588235294 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.47058823529 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.11438686424 0.244688304435 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0395782405714 0.084324248473 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0417940051883 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0914693016695 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0541759735237 0.056905535591 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.22 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.