Nowadays people depend on technology for leisure activities. Is this a positive or negative development?
It is true that in today’s digital age, children has increasingly used modern technology whenever they have freetime. From my observation, this phenomenon has detrimental effects on children’s growth.
On the one hand, depending on technology for leisure activities can make children have several issues in their personal growth. To commence with, enagaging in online games on either mobile phones or computers can result in sedentary lifestyle in children, leading to the risk of suffering from obesity or eyesight problems. In contrast, if children go out to play, they can expose with vitamin D, which is one of the most crucial factors affecting children’s development.
Although children can relax in their freetime by using modern technologies, such as game consoles, overdepending on them can make kids become game addictors that can lead to the distraction in their academic performances. Moreover, children can lack interpersonal skills if they sit excessive time in front of screens and refuse to outdoor activities. Outdoor activities not only broaden children’s perspective but also provide them communication, teamwork, and problem-solving skill. It is true that technology offers children several platforms or games where they can comminicate with their peers easily or they can build their own virtual world, which can promote their creativity. However, many research studies have shown that kids tend to have the feeling of scare or unwilling to face real life when they too immerse themselves in their virtual worlds.
In conclusion, while I accept that technology serve as a way for children’s leisure activities, I still believe that it more likely has several disadvantagous impacts on children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, so, still, while, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 13.1623246493 23% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1466.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 265.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.5320754717 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07776509004 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.622641509434 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 443.7 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.5411700918 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.272727273 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0909090909 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0902932239834 0.244688304435 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.046793849083 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0685747905908 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0757859945312 0.151304729494 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0357286407843 0.056905535591 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.09 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.59 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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