Nowadays young people have to make the decision about their future career Some people however believe that teachers and parents can make a better choice for their future career Discuss both options and include your opinion with relevant examples from your

Submitted by Justin on Thu, 01/05/2017 - 21:45
In this modern world, the ultimate target of every individual is to become successful in his future career. Presently, most of youngsters have tendency to make decisions about their careers by themselves. However, some people claim that parents and teachers can make productive decisions about their careers to ensure their bright future. Here, i would like to account for both sides with my own perception.

There are numerous points to endorse the former view. First and foremost, modern generation is advanced, technically skilful and well educated and therefore they are capable to make quality decisions without any help from elders. Besides this, everyone wants freedom to choose his professional career according to his interest, ability and requirement. Hence, young people do not want to take burden of their parent's expectations regarding their career. Consequently, most of youngsters believe in making self-decisions about their careers. On the contrary, others have conflicting views.

They think that quality decisions about future career can only be made by guardians and teachers. To illustrate, parents and teachers are veteran of life stages and therefore they have ability to have a deep insight in order to differentiate right and wrong. By contrast, young people who are inexperienced and immature may take wrong decisions. Thus, parents and teachers should be assigned to make career decisions for their young children. What is more, guardians and teachers understand the strength and weakness of their young children. Therefore, career chosen by them could be a 'perfect fit' for youngsters.

From my notion, both sides have their own significance. Undeniably, young people are confident for their ability to make right decisions for their career However, we can never underestimate the advice of elders. It is advisable for young people to discuss about their career choice with their elders in order to get the benefit of their experience and knowledge

To recapitulate, making superior decisions about career has become a herculean task in this competitive world. Therefore, youngsters, teachers and parents must share their views to find out the best outcomes for their decisions.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the youngsters') or simply say ''most youngsters''.
Suggestion: most of the youngsters; most youngsters
...essful in his future career. Presently, most of youngsters have tendency to make decisions about t...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...rs to ensure their bright future. Here, i would like to account for both sides wi...
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Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the youngsters') or simply say ''most youngsters''.
Suggestion: most of the youngsters; most youngsters
...s regarding their career. Consequently, most of youngsters believe in making self-decisions about ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, consequently, first, hence, however, if, may, regarding, so, therefore, thus, well, on the contrary, what is more

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1919.0 1615.20841683 119% => OK
No of words: 349.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.49856733524 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80589612445 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535816618911 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 577.8 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.1679927842 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.95 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.45 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.1 7.06120827912 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.50782973888 0.244688304435 208% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.155465867256 0.084324248473 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111045573332 0.0667982634062 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.264558880792 0.151304729494 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.140269333507 0.056905535591 246% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.32 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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