The number of overweight children in developed countries is increasing. Some people think this is due to problems such as the growing number of fast food outlets. Others believe that parents are to blame for not looking after their children's health.
To what extent do you agree with these views?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
Nowadays, the proportion of children obesity in developed countries is increasing. Some people argue it is because the fast food, while the others lack of parental attention to children's health. I totally with the statement for the following reasons.
On the one hand, the number of fast food restaurants all around the world rose sharply in the recent times. Surveys found that more than 1,000 outlets of McDonalds, KFC, and Burger King are open in every parts of the world in the last 4 months. Fast food restaurants also offer the affordable prices, thus all circles of society can buy it. Moreover, fast food restaurants provide lots of discount in certain days. For example in the independence day or celebrating bank anniversary, most of fast food restaurants give an attractive discount up to 50% or 75%, which can make people want to buy it. Those kinds of marketing obviously can make an obesity to people, especially to children, because fast food contains big calories.
On the other hand, parents are rarely to look after the children's health. Recent studies show that most parents are busy in the office, therefore, they can not take care of their children well. As a result, they will be infrequently to take the children to the hospital to do the health check-up. Although most of parents already rent a nanny to take care their children's, majority of them do not care about the food portion that eaten by the child, they only care about the child's happiness.
In brief, the causes of overweight children's are mostly because of the fast food discounts and lack of parental affection to children's health because they are too busy.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 307, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the parents') or simply say ''most parents''.
Suggestion: most of the parents; most parents
...tal to do the health check-up. Although most of parents already rent a nanny to take care their...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, look, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, in brief, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1374.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90714285714 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58487555458 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.560714285714 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 407.7 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.7280678428 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.1428571429 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.78571428571 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.316311840171 0.244688304435 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116168092392 0.084324248473 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0852066260231 0.0667982634062 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204280381132 0.151304729494 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0606102682686 0.056905535591 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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