One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing.
Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
Technological advancements have not only attributed to many new scientific discoveries but also remarkably improved medicine and medical science. This century is blessed with comprehensive medical care and the lifespan of people has enhanced and still increasing through modern medicines and treatments. I believe the result has enlightened the human civilisation and the disadvantages of increasing life expectancy are ignorable.
Ultra-modern facilities and advanced medicines have transformed medical facilities and cured many deadly diseases. With improved lifespan, people can contribute more to society. Early retirement plans let them start another profession as they are more active these days. For instance, many professionals these days start their own business after their retirements. This trend welcomes freshers to have jobs and eradicate unemployment.
Moreover, as a direct result of improved life-expectancy, people can spend more time with their family and grandchildren. Working parents can leave their children in safe hands while at work. The way grandparents care for their grandchildren is incomparable to the attention they would receive from a daycare centre. From this regard, we need our elder parents to be with us more than ever before. Finally, the way many see the elder generation as a responsibility to society is no longer true. These elder people can share their experience that we can use to build a better and safer world. Older politicians, bankers, writers and researchers, for example, have far more to offer than their young counterparts.
In conclusion, improved lifespan profoundly benefits the family as well as society. We should feel obliged to treat our ancestors as they did for us when we were children. They are no longer a burden, but an asset for the country.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 416, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun see seems to be countable; consider using: 'many sees'.
Suggestion: many sees
...more than ever before. Finally, the way many see the elder generation as a responsibilit...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, moreover, so, still, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 41.998997996 57% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1542.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 279.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.52688172043 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11412403866 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.609318996416 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 485.1 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.5403744024 49.4020404114 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 85.6666666667 106.682146367 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5 20.7667163134 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11111111111 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15232376571 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0491030386682 0.084324248473 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0515607714417 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100709734592 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0766101751976 0.056905535591 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 50.2224549098 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.5 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.