One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think advantages outweigh disadvantages?
These days, health care improvement benefits from the development of technology, and one of the greatest achievements is the considerable expansion in human's life span. Despite some problems resulting from this, I strongly believe that the advantages it brings much more than disadvantages.
It is undeniable that the increase in longevity has its issue. The amount of old people goes up significantly annually, which puts pressure on hospitals because they are vulnerable and maybe have some chronic disease. Besides, with a population aging trend in some countries in Asia, the elderly were regarded as a burden leading to the lack of respect for them, so the youngsters tend to refuse marriage life as they think that would make them older more quickly. However, these downsides are inadequate to overshadow the benefits of lengthening life expectancy.
The purpose of the burgeoning medicine nowadays is to help humans avoid the decline of their health, so the sustainability in people's lives is reasonable. They might have abundant experiences accumulated during their entire life, especially in traditional jobs, they pass down to later generations to preserve them also the unique culture of each country. Some of elderly people are the witness for history and world's changes. Not only have they enthusiastically contributed to help the history documents be more complete, but they also raise the awareness of the terrible devastation of the war and the lofty value of peace. In addition, should humans live longer, they will have a chance to spend the most meaningful time with their family and be satisfied for the rest of their life.
In conclusion, from my perspective, longevity is not a worrisome matter, old folk play a crucial role and be reliable evidence for the ultimate development of medicine. If people abandon the bad bias of the old age, absolutely everyone will be on good terms and enjoy a tranquil life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, may, so, then, thus, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1626.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 313.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19488817891 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91812068801 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.610223642173 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 528.3 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.8499358538 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.076923077 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0769230769 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.15384615385 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140076968512 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.048453695953 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0343002349438 0.0667982634062 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0794358854613 0.151304729494 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0278279655987 0.056905535591 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.37 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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