Parents should encourage children to spend less time studying and more time doing physical activities To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Parents should encourage children to spend less time studying and more time doing physical activities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Faced with the potential consequences from the heavy school workload, some parents encouraged their children to participate in outdoor activities to reduce children’s pressure. To the best of my knowledge, this point of view is grounded for the following reasons.
Firstly, it is note-worthy that physical activities do a great job in physical and mental well-being. Nowadays, many sociological studies have shown that although it is invisible, the overall awareness of the young towards health by doing outdoor activities is accompanied by enhancing study efficiency. Therefore, it will be a grave mistake to neglect the fact that hanging out in the natural environment helps children improve their health and physical fitness after their stressful time at school. For instance, if children concentrate only on study and ignore doing physical activities, they will be peer-pressured which might have negative effects on children’s health. This example is the illustration of the fact that young people should follow their parents’ advices and spend more leisure time on doing outdoor activities.
Secondly, the counter-argument raised by the objectors to this is that with the stiff competition in contemporary society, young people are afflicted with busy studying schedules everyday which leads to have less time for physical activities. This argument could be true to some extent; however, it is incomplete. What they fail to take into account to this is that schools organize many activities for young people to engage in. Therefore, parents should encourage their children to spend more time on this activities which provides them with more opportunities to make new friends and communicate with each other. For example, many schools promote students to join in physical activities at school by awarding plus marks and interesting presents.
According to the above analysis, we can conclude that there are many chronic positive effects on health and movement activities at school when children spend more their time on outdoor activities rather than studying.

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Average: 7.2 (11 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
... afflicted with busy studying schedules everyday which leads to have less time for physi...
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Line 3, column 504, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ge their children to spend more time on this activities which provides them with mor...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1759.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 318.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.53144654088 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93294420378 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544025157233 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 532.8 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.102982231 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.307692308 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4615384615 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.15384615385 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.357808528664 0.244688304435 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123218031295 0.084324248473 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0745870668123 0.0667982634062 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203269948288 0.151304729494 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.078572690108 0.056905535591 138% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.09 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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