In the past, shopping was a routine domestic task. Many people nowadays regard it as a hobby.To what extent do you think this is a positive trend?

Essay topics:

In the past, shopping was a routine domestic task. Many people nowadays regard it as a hobby.

To what extent do you think this is a positive trend?

In this century many shopaholics tends to buy a lot of things. This is not only becomes the routine of the usual task, but it has become a habit for many people. I believe this trend is to make the company get more profit and a higher GDP of the country.

Business gets to profit from the payment of products from customers. This amount of money can make companies bigger and produces more quantities of new products. Last 5 years Samsung has become the most favorite phone brand. The upgrade the size of their manufacturer and open more factories to help them to launch their newest phone product every year. This is one of two beneficial movements from shoppers.

The country has a higher GDP tends to become more attractive for investors to invest their money. 40 percent of Indonesia's GDP gets from this shopping culture. On the other hand, many start-up companies in Indonesia can easily get additional funding from foreign business countries to help expand and upscale the size of this new company. This issue can prove that society becomes part to higher their countries GDP.

In conclusion, the rising tendency of shopping can help all the elements of the company to expand and make an advancement in the country. I strongly trust the buyers to help the economy of their countries by buying products. A small contribution line buys a product that can become a part of citizen who involves making enlargement growth in business sectors and countries.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, so, in conclusion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 13.1623246493 23% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1225.0 1615.20841683 76% => OK
No of words: 251.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88047808765 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52843388073 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 176.041082164 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.533864541833 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 370.8 506.74238477 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.3232690069 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.6666666667 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7333333333 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.73333333333 7.06120827912 39% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0952442512813 0.244688304435 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0387681589703 0.084324248473 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0414142814939 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0701205248223 0.151304729494 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0607885469643 0.056905535591 107% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 13.0946893788 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 78.4519038076 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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