It is true that the consumption of sugary drinks is increasing globally nowadays. The main reason is this beverage’s attraction and a change in the way they are advertised can remedy this problem.
In my opinion, three main factors are to blame for the rising consumption in sugar based drinks. First, soft drinks become a go-to choice not only because of its taste but also its convenience especially when a hot summer day comes. People easily pick it out of the vending machine installed around public places such as school yards, cinemas, bus stops,... Second, instead of beer or alcoholic drinks, people consider sugary drinks as a perfect replacement in some parties having children or elderly. Finally, the food industry ‘s PR machinery also targeted audiences like young people and children for encouraging consuming more and more sugary beverages.
Sugar based drinks contain mainly saccharine which is the real culprit of many abnormalities such as diabetes, dyslipidemia, gout,... Therefore, the behavior of consumers should be improved as soon as possible. Fruit juice might be taken over as a best way to go on since they contain no saccharine and they are rich vitamin supplement sources. Also, the way sugary drinks are advertised need to be shifted. Governments should foster health awareness campaigns on TV and internet including compulsory messages of health warnings on labels, like tobacco products. At the same time, consumers need to understand the variety of risks they might face unless they change their habits.
In conclusion, it might take quite a lot of work to shift our consumption of sugar based drinks, but it needs to be tackled now by both consumers and the government.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, second, so, therefore, in conclusion, in fact, such as, in my opinion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1437.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 278.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1690647482 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74456660072 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.63309352518 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 436.5 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.5072758133 49.4020404114 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.642857143 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8571428571 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321482166438 0.244688304435 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0986380877613 0.084324248473 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0704689249602 0.0667982634062 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170921052337 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0449344197206 0.056905535591 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.