At the present time the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults compared with the number of older people Do you think that the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages

In the nations of the world, there are wide variety of population types. Some, such as Japan, have a population with many more seniors than young people, and the average age is increasing. Others, such as Iran and Kenya have a young population with relatively few elderly people. Although there are disadvantages to a population dominated by young adults, the advantages are much greater.

First, in a population with the majority of people at child-bearing ages, the birth rate may be quite high. The result is that the number of people will increase unsustainably. It puts a lot of strain on the available resources, because there are more mouths to feed, but there is a limit on the amount of food production. It will also burden the healthcare, education and housing systems. The government will have to raise taxes to pay for growing the capacity of these public systems, putting a severe financial burden on the wage-earners. The outcome of all this pressure can be famine, poverty and illiteracy. However, that is the most pessimistic scenario, and there are ways to avoid it. If birth control measures are widely available, or there are laws limiting the number of children per family, population growth can be curtailed to a reasonable or even an ideal level.

Second, given a large working-age population, the economy will flourish because international companies will move in and build manufacturing facilities to take advantage of the large available workforce. Taxes from these companies provides funds for the government to invest in education, healthcare, environmental protection and infrastructure. The standard of living and quality of life in these countries will rise. Generous pensions can be paid to the older retired people, who can serve as caretakers of the children, volunteer teachers, and the keepers of customs and traditions of their culture.

In conclusion, having a population with a large number of young adults is extremely beneficial for a nation, and the disadvantages can be limited by the government taking appropriate policies.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 41, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 24.0651302605 42% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1743.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 333.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23423423423 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03281300305 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561561561562 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 566.1 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 0.809619238477 741% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.0982188042 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.529411765 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5882352941 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.11764705882 7.06120827912 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228775258542 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0670571458773 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0647806780495 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144917819649 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0631101959169 0.056905535591 111% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.42 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 78.4519038076 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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