people think children should have a pet to take care while other disagree Discuss both views and give opinions

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people think children should have a pet to take care, while other disagree. Discuss both views and give opinions.

Besides the profits have animals made in agriculture and pharmaceutical industry, they also have close relationship with human particularly, children as pets. Although there are several arguments made surrounding whether necessary or not that youngsters should take care of pets, personally I think that issue is a matter of taste and affected by many elements.
A fundamental reason for considering benefits of nurturing a pet to children is that it would help in forming a child's behavior pattern.
By raising a lived creature that infants learn how to shoulder responsibility with which they possessed , therefore, making optimistic impacts on thur
manner as well as personality is later stage of life & Moreover, interacting with pets on daily basic lever likely to help youngsters having a kind heart and patient when dealing with challenges since they get have got used to it in the early ages by looking after their pets
However, owning pets is really depends on children's life condition besides taking other factors relating to health or finance into accounts. Obviously not every youngster is able to afford expenses of put necessary demands, particularly when children spend most of their time for education instead of working, they do not receive any source of income.
Secondly, some infants are not vigorous enough to take care themself, due to, perhaps, lack of survival skills or illnesses, much less their pets.
Furthermore, come allergies make the young unlikely to own to bring up a pet, which can be named such as a fur allergy or respirators inflammation, for instance.
In conclusion, despite do pets carry along a myriad of advantage that are probably a great deal for children during their mature process, there are still some inadequacies presenting in this statement. Hence I strongly believe that there should be no standard pet but depending on individuals.

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Average: 8.9 (1 vote)
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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...responsibility with which they possessed , therefore, making optimistic impacts on...
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Suggestion:
...espirators inflammation, for instance. In conclusion, despite do pets carry alo...
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Line 8, column 204, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...dequacies presenting in this statement. Hence I strongly believe that there should be...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, well, for instance, i think, in conclusion, such as, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1592.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25412541254 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89627920216 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.673267326733 0.561755894193 120% => OK
syllable_count: 499.5 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.2975951904 163% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 132.428410663 49.4020404114 268% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 176.888888889 106.682146367 166% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.6666666667 20.7667163134 162% => OK
Discourse Markers: 20.0 7.06120827912 283% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.38176352705 183% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196238417394 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0748111113621 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0347164713772 0.0667982634062 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0750798684409 0.151304729494 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0447467980402 0.056905535591 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.1 13.0946893788 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 50.2224549098 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.3001002004 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.02 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.1190380762 150% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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